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Re: Cause & Effect

Postby classthe_king » Mar 29th, '10, 04:02

I pretty much agree with solace. The imagery was really good but I just couldn't catch onto the flow or the rhyming. This concept was very hard though, something I would never be able to do, and I thought that you pulled it off well. Hope to see more of you in the future :y:

And do you mind checkin one of my pieces :flower:
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Re: Cause & Effect

Postby Arabian Shady » Mar 29th, '10, 04:33

classthe_king wrote:I pretty much agree with solace. The imagery was really good but I just couldn't catch onto the flow or the rhyming. This concept was very hard though, something I would never be able to do, and I thought that you pulled it off well. Hope to see more of you in the future :y:

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I guess that something I'll have to FOCUS and work on , lmao
thanks for the feed bro, I'ma peep your stuff as soon as I get back from Uni, in 2 hrs approx. Gna give a midterm, I don't want to end up writing your verse as answers :laughing:
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Re: Cause & Effect

Postby gutawafang » Mar 29th, '10, 08:27

I apologize for not being able to flow although I know it should. :p shame on me. :sweating:

However, it cannot be denied that the lyrics is so poetic man. Good expression, really. And I like the title also. :flower:

Write more often man. :worship:
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Re: Cause & Effect

Postby Arabian Shady » Mar 29th, '10, 08:36

Hahahaha, don't apologize man , I guess the structure makes it hard to read, but it's all good
I'm glad you like the piece, Ima do better next time, Fo'sho'
thanks for the feed man, means alot !!
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: Cause & Effect

Postby Yah-hah » Mar 30th, '10, 14:41

:worship: Yeah bro was was really good. Storytellin :y: Wanna hear it :p
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Re: Cause & Effect

Postby Arabian Shady » Mar 31st, '10, 08:41

Yah-hah wrote::worship: Yeah bro was was really good. Storytellin :y: Wanna hear it :p


haha, it was written to a beat so prolly in the future when i have a mic..and some time to record
thanks for peepin man, and for the feed as well
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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