my shit, i put in the wrong place

[spitz]

hey, i put my this in the wrong forum, so only 4 ppl saw it, so here it is in the right section

ok, i needa no if my shit is good or not, plz no that im kinda new to the rap game

in my eyes this whole rap -game is sowed-/
i shove a grenade in yo mouth n watch ya -brain explode-/
im ravonous n rabid n im -thirstin blood-/
that'll leave you upside down head -first in mud-/
im ill enough to be thrown off a mountain n -still live-/
n i stay jazzy n fresh with out jeff n -will smith-/
cuz i think i was put here to make -noise n cuss-/
cuz im sicker than michael jackson shoppin at -toys r us-/

some short shit, if u aint get the jazzy line, dj "jazzy" jeff was the dj for will smith, back then known as the "fresh" prince, hope that clears that up, if i cood get some feedback....well thanks cuz i got nuthin 2 give

[DragonzEdge]

thats a little too short isnt it?

[spitz]

i was in a rush cuz my friend wanted me 2 go flippin wit'em, n i dont gotta good attention span, so i hada whip some shit up quick n jet

[Vettori]

Still i think it's good for a quicky,
Nice job 7-10
i give it
props

"faith"

[4D]

For a first timer and a quickie, it`s very good. I also give it a 7 outta 10.