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These Bitches piss me off

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These Bitches piss me off

Postby Zare » Aug 30th, '05, 12:28

2 of my friends got jumped by these fags ( 5 of em ) now they're laying in the hospital

this song is dedicated to all those people who have no chance to defend them selfs and suffer:

Dont you relize life is short
but in the game ( life ) never abort//
Voodoo Shit hearts be poundin fear calling your tears falling//
you gotta answer that call //
then wait and get shot and fall..(fall)//
theres nothing you can really do//
cuz god pleaded this ( woopady fucking doo)//
theres a bright light in the air so you look up//
but theres no chance its just fucked up//

just like 50 cent said " your promised death"//
but your not promised unlimited blood shed//
people say your paranoid cuz you think death comes every hour//
but thats a fear that you just gotta devour//
dont you belive it when Zare spits sad shit//
but this is wrong never ask some so you can get hit//
death just gets closer and closer//
theres no choice on the street that i walk//
theres no choice what people do when you talk//
just fuck up and forget that it happened//
cuz when you die your memory is dampened..dampened..dampened//

So what did u guys think? yeah its pretty sucky I know , I'm not that good at making up a rap just as I type..And my rap battle skills are much better then this.

just dont say if I took longer then 3 min to make it up then take more time cuz i already know


//Zare//
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Yo

Postby Vettori » Aug 30th, '05, 23:06

It's deep man, thats what i like in songs/raps
It's good man, igive it an 8 outta 10,
Nice one man, keep it up,
Peace

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Postby Zare » Aug 30th, '05, 23:23

Thx man , at least someone rated it *rolls eyes*
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