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Patriotic (Edited - Now A Full Song)

Postby MikeNUFC » Apr 28th, '11, 19:15

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Re: Patriotic

Postby MikeNUFC » Apr 30th, '11, 11:52

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Re: Patriotic

Postby VenomBlackViper » Apr 30th, '11, 13:13

Nice man, especially in the midst of all of this Royal Wedding bullshit which I've heard about like 10 times yesterday & I live in all the way in America. I like how you described everything the opposite of how it really was. All in all in was great as always. :y:
Now where's my rap for feed? :shifty:
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Re: Patriotic

Postby Fa-Q » Apr 30th, '11, 16:21

Really original with the sarcasm :laughing: ...(that sounds like I'm being a douche but I'm being sincere.) Anyway, great use of using political points in rhyming. And fuck!! You guys paid for that fatass, waste of money wedding? :o
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Re: Patriotic

Postby MikeNUFC » Apr 30th, '11, 17:13

Cheers people, it's appreciated :b:

And yep, the taxpayer has to pay for it. Along with all the extra security etc. Absolute joke.
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Re: Patriotic

Postby VenomBlackViper » Apr 30th, '11, 20:59

This piece was the best thing that came out of that fucking wedding.
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Re: Patriotic

Postby mcZu » May 1st, '11, 19:03

Good piece, man. Nice way of portraying your thoughts while keeping a good level of lyricism in it. Good job.
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Re: Patriotic

Postby MikeNUFC » May 2nd, '11, 17:23

Appreciate it zu :b:
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Re: Patriotic

Postby Maybe » May 2nd, '11, 18:55

The whole thing was flawless. It's actually difficult to comment on a piece I like so much, because I'm usually a constructive-feedback kind of person. The flow was great, lyrics were great, bla bla bla... what made this amazing was the content. Sarcasm + Rap = Awesome.
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Re: Patriotic

Postby MikeNUFC » May 3rd, '11, 17:14

Maybe wrote:The whole thing was flawless. It's actually difficult to comment on a piece I like so much, because I'm usually a constructive-feedback kind of person. The flow was great, lyrics were great, bla bla bla... what made this amazing was the content. Sarcasm + Rap = Awesome.


Wow. Thanks a lot man, I really appreciate it.
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Re: Patriotic (Edited - Now A Full Song)

Postby MikeNUFC » May 17th, '11, 20:38

Bumping as I've edited into a full song :b:
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Re: Patriotic (Edited - Now A Full Song)

Postby Maybe » May 17th, '11, 20:45

MikeNUFC wrote:Bumping as I've edited into a full song :b:


This is great stuff man. It's perfect as a song... I really don't have much else to say. I can't really critique music that I like a lot.
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Re: Patriotic (Edited - Now A Full Song)

Postby MikeNUFC » May 17th, '11, 21:21

Maybe wrote:
MikeNUFC wrote:Bumping as I've edited into a full song :b:


This is great stuff man. It's perfect as a song... I really don't have much else to say. I can't really critique music that I like a lot.


Thanks a lot man
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Re: Patriotic (Edited - Now A Full Song)

Postby MikeNUFC » May 18th, '11, 19:18

:b: Cheers man

And nah, I don't record (yet)
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