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While Driving Down A Road

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While Driving Down A Road

Postby Ivy » May 2nd, '06, 23:59

The point of this story was to make it sad and emotional, it worked for the people who were reading over my shoulder as I wrote it :zipped: But what do you guys think?

While driving down the road, I saw an elderly couple retrieving their
family dog from the highway.
The old man bent down to the dog's lifeless body. He touched his hand
to its chest. He studied the body and the demented figure. He rubbed his
hands across the ribcage, you could feel the cracked ribs. He removed
his hands from the dog's chest, and flipped them over. They were
drenched in the dog's blood. The old lady gasped.
The old man eyes were glazed, no emotions could be detected. Without
hesitation he placed the dog's limp body on the tailgate of the truck.
The old lady stood nearby on the roadside her eyes beginning to water;
soon they were overflowing with tears. She tried wiping them away with
her hand, but soon gave up for the tears kept coming. Finally, she fell
to the ground, screaming. She then held her home-made apron to her
face, hiding all features of her beauty. Her arms soon gave out and fell to
her side, scraping her hands against the pavement. Her body was shaking
frantically.
The old man watched this scene, but the devastation of the woman didn't
seem to ravel any sympathy from him. He then slammed the tailgate,
throwing the dog's body into the bed of the truck.
The old lady having seen this began to shout at the old man, what she
said could not be understood because her voice was hoarse from crying.
The old man simply left her on the roadside crying. He walked over to
his truck and climbed into the cab. He shut the door and began singing
to an old Hank Williams song, "Got a feeling called the blues since my
baby said goodbye."
The old woman was red with anger and couldn't believe the harshness of
her husband's behavior. She slowly began to stand to her feet, soon she
stood there, her knees were buckling. She made her way to the passenger
side of the truck and ripped open the door. She sat inside and slammed
the door.
The old man was raged with her actions, and as they drove down the
gravel road, you could hear the two bickering and arguing. Their truck grew
smaller and finally disappeared as the distance grew. But, you could
still hear the old couple ranting and raving. The passer-bye who had
witnessed the whole event, could picture the crushed body of the dog, and
he turned and stared at the stained dirt where the dog's body once
layed.

(Garntt, Taylor ,2006)
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Postby Ivy » May 3rd, '06, 20:06

Sarah wrote:What gave you the idea to write that? :(


I was given a scenario(sp), and I had to manipulate it and make it sad, and tragic. :unsure: :zipped:
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Postby > Evil _ MoNkEy < » May 4th, '06, 00:59

that sounds like my parents :zipped:

newhom... that was a great story, very tradgic....kinda leaves u woundering wat happened next...... very good use of detail, u painted a picture with ur words, a trademark of a good writer.... very well thought out and put together......... im a dog lover, so... this story really got to me.... i know wat its like to lose a dog... my 2 were dumped off in the middle of nowere by my sisters then bf, and i still cry if i think about it........ a dog is a dog only in body, but in mind and spirit it is human..... my dogs r my only friends really... the only ones that stick by me..... and thats y it hurts so bad to lose them..... its as if ur best friend is gone..... theyr is nuthing more loyal than a dog... and everytime i see that episode of futerama, the one about frys dog, i bust out in tears and bawl like a baby.,..... cus i can just see my long lost coco, waiting for me to come and find him and take him home...... jesus christ, im crying now........ and sandy... i got her from an old friend, cus she couldnt keep her cus she was moving, and i promise id always take care of her..... and its like, they were so loyal and always by my side, and i let them down....... everytime i lose a dog (2 died of old age, the one... sunny, she died in my arms..... and 2 were dumped off..... 1 was given away... not to mention the 2 litters of puppies coco and sandie had together) its like u lose a part of u... i was raised with dogs my whole life, and i dont know wat id do if i didnt have a wet nose and wegging tail to cheer me up wen i was sad...... sometimes i swear i prefer dogs to humans, lol....... they dont judge, or hold grudges... they welcome u with sloppy kisses and tackle u to the ground from excitment....... they r truely a good ego boost...... they dont ask for much, just some kibbles and a good chew toy.... and they give you all the love in the world........... im sorry.... i dont mean to ramble on... but thats wat this storey brings to my mind.... it really makes me think, and that shows a true talent.... to cause others to reflect on there own expeiriences and relate to the story in one way or another
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Postby Ivy » May 4th, '06, 23:18

I've never really had to deal with that, personally Anna. I've had to take animals back from where I got them because they were sick, and I don't know and don't want to know what happened to them. I know they put them to sleep, I just don't want to imagine that. I want to imagine them in the arms of a little child being loved and fed and in a good home. But who doesn't? I've never had to face death in my life, not through family, friends, or animals. I guess I'm lucky in that sense. I don't know. I'm in the mood for writing, so I might post something new here soon. :flower:
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Postby > Evil _ MoNkEy < » May 5th, '06, 10:07

TaylorakaTiGGi wrote:I've never really had to deal with that, personally Anna. I've had to take animals back from where I got them because they were sick, and I don't know and don't want to know what happened to them. I know they put them to sleep, I just don't want to imagine that. I want to imagine them in the arms of a little child being loved and fed and in a good home. But who doesn't? I've never had to face death in my life, not through family, friends, or animals. I guess I'm lucky in that sense. I don't know. I'm in the mood for writing, so I might post something new here soon. :flower:


we were on r way to have her put to sleep wen she died :'( i was holdin her in my arms in the car... she just kept havin seizures..... but before she died she pissed on me :zipped: so it kinda took some of the setiment out of the whole situation........

and its be awsome if u posted some new stuff :flower:

btw... sorry bout yesterday.... i dont know wat happened...... u said it said i was offline, and i was like wat? and the next thing i know, msn just signed me out for no reason and my computer crashed.... newayz, i had to go out with my mom at noon...... and didnt get home till 5:30.... and i just crawled into bed wen i got home.... damn i was tired.... i still am.... i woke up at about 2 am..... now its 5..... i think i should go nap...... :(
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