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Postby Blu » Dec 1st, '11, 01:21

12 bars. Wrote it for practice. Check dis shit out.
LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=134067&p=1813342#p1813342

Blu wrote:Multi after multi this shit is gettin' ridiculous,
I'ma throw a fit cuz I'm spittin' and I'm gettin' sick of this,
Hittin' the flow and you must not know,
I'm not gonna stay here sittin' to blow,
Keep talkin' and I'm gonna stay contempt,
But you shouldn't even bother to attempt,
Cuz growin' up I never realized but father was unkempt,
I'm blowin' up knowin' now any chick I could tempt,
Sticking my brain in some hemp,
Helps relieve the pain cuz I'm a temp,
In this rap game, believe me I'm gonna snap fame
This is a wrap dame, keep hollerin', see if I'm not to blame.
Last edited by Blu on Dec 4th, '11, 08:04, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: 6 minutes

Postby SG. » Dec 1st, '11, 03:22

This is good. Certainly an improvement from your previous work. I'd say you could probably work this into a proper track, providing you had a good hook. Keep improving. :y:
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Re: 6 minutes

Postby Blu » Dec 2nd, '11, 00:37

Thanks Zabe, appreciate it. Yeah, I'd definitely love to add a hook but unfortunately I'm not the best hook writer. :(

Thanks though Zabe!!! :y:
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Re: 6 minutes

Postby Man1x » Dec 2nd, '11, 05:27

Little short but it's a huge improvement. Keep packin the heat bro
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Re: 6 minutes

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Dec 2nd, '11, 19:44

It's short yes, but pretty good. You've improved a long way since I last remember lol. Keep it up my dude. :y:
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