Its Not a Happy Strory

[CrashBand]

Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=143057&start=15
Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YP8RUYabuYo

Sort of a fuck around, jokey, semi story-telling verse

Yo... Bro..... It's not a happy story but
Your girls a horny slut, said that you're a boring fuck
thats when I met her, Sorry for no warning bruh
I fucked her five times, Not counting the morning ones!
I need new grammar, phrase better to word it
How can I say she's way lesser then perfect
She sucked for five minutes but she definitely hurt it
I found a few bruises I needa check if its workin'
A second and third its fucking ruined a bit
Couple days later the colours going blue from the tip
I wished I had yelled "bitch you're practically biting"
Why can't you tell I dont actually like it
This is the reason that I won't text you back
So better get used to me and my phone being flat
"See what I care cos I hate all you men"
She was back the next week, my dicks aching again

[JamaicanPattlez]

This was pretty good, nice job. :Y: Haha I liked the content too, good job man. Can't wait to see further work from you!

[CrashBand]

Pretty dope for your first drop. Most new guys never post a link of feed either haha, so thanks.

Some decent story telling and some funny lines. Liked how you had the girl do a line, that's a good touch. If you have a concept or beat I'm down to do something if you want.

Cheers man yeah def would be keen for a collab where i can try and keep up with you haha

This was pretty good, nice job. :Y: Haha I liked the content too, good job man. Can't wait to see further work from you!

and thanks man, yeah it must be an em influence for my more fun, jokey content in this.
will def try and write some more for this section now

[JamaicanPattlez]

Haha great to hear! Mind returning the feedback? viewtopic.php?f=24&t=143461 Thanks man!