Ego - Crossing Paths

[mdemaz]

Stupid as always man, keep it up.

Nice storytelling.

[CrashBand]

This was a creative piece. It took me few reads through both pieces to fully get my head around it.

I liked it, there were good 'twists' in the plot with you guys forgetting the body is still in the trunk.

"Bled all over 'til you drop, expectin' that? I bet you're not" this was a nice line, made me chuckle.

I tohught Menzo's rhyming was superb exmplified by these lines
"....that proves us loons are loose and crazed
A nuisance to a few who stray from groups assumin’ routes are safe"
Flows like a river.

I'm not too sure what to think about running into em and royce at the end. Wee bit abstract. I guess we are all stans though. I thought it was a bit of a sidetrack from your story, unless I'm missing something lol.

Overall the storytelling is done very well and you two interchanging seems really effortless. I was definately visualizing it all happening in front of me. The conversation btween you was good, great chemistry.

I feel you guys are at a point with your rhyming and flow where you cant critique it too much. The multies aren't in your face eitherm which is a good thing with storytelling pieces as you virtually have multies in every line but none of them seem forced, as in put there for the sake of the rhyme.
Even the first 8 bars continue ..A..A/..A..A/ with the ocassional..A..A/.. ..A/. Solid rhyming while staying on the story. If that made any sense lmao.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

DAMNNN this piece was awesome!! I checked out that first piece and its probably my favorite track that I have read in the CW section very nice, this track was right up there with it! you guys transitioned into each others parts really well I can tell a lot of hard work went into it! Everything seemed to flow really good, Both of you guys's multis were great! and your story telling is amazing This was a really nice piece guys keep up the good work,!

[Blu]

Lmao, I liked it. I found the part where Geno realized the body was still in trunk pretty funny, and the ending was great.

Solid piece. 9/10 would bang.

[Mr.DGAF]

As always, this was nice. I'm sure I've said it all before, you guys interchange so well, continue each others thoughts yada yada yada. I liked the beat on this one, really good choice, it gives a relaxed vibe which is sort of amplified by the situation in the piece. You guys painted a very vivid picture, this is great story-telling here. And the twist at the end, I kind of like actually. I didn't expect it at all, and then I went back and read some things that started to give it away. So good job foreshadowing there. The flow is always on point, it's always cool to see how you guys write and make it coherent and flow every time. Very nice stuff, in other words.

Mind returning the favor? http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=145468

[RainMan44]

first off i gotta say i agree with revolutionary, this straight up felt like a mix between bad meets evil and the reunion..

i fucking loved this, the story telling was phenomenal.
this was creative, rhyming was dope as usual...you guys just click very nicely. the way you guys feed off eachothers lines is incredible.

i feel like the most surprising part isnt the story itself, but the way you guys executed it and lenghtened a little concept into something so long yet interesting to read and vivid. personally thats something i struggle with, but you guys found diff ways to keep the story interesting.

very nice piece, both of you did well.

keep it up guys

[Eedee]

Diggin' this drop. As always, the rhyming is superb. The originality of the concept, with BME, etc, is refreshing. I'm sure you two know how dope you are, no need for me to say it (although I guess I just did) haha.

[Emadyville]

geno just sent me this now so sorry for the really late feed lol but uh amazing.

obv some shit was hard to follow cause its long and im not hearing it, but i could tell the storytelling was fuckin dope throughout, as well as the rhyming and the flow for the most part.

2 parts stood out a lot with the rhymes but mainly the flow, just had to point these out:

You thinkin’ what I’m thinkin? Grab his legs I’ll gag his mouth
I’ll have to count, from three..two..one, SNAG HIM NOW! (muffled screams)
Okay, he’s down and out, keep an eye out for the other one
Meanwhile stuff this fuckin cunt in the trunk with the other slut

The moon is full today, that proves us loons are loose and crazed
A nuisance to a few who stray from groups assumin’ routes are safe

great work guys