Geno - Bask (Fiasco Day 1)

[J.R.]

Wedding ring,
Finger.

Beggin to stay,
Kissin em.

The lines I quoted above are examples of lines where you cut it off and finish it in the next line (Although Kissin em is kind of a stretch, it still fits more with the line above it)- which usually doesn't work, but you managed it, and that's impressive as hell. Your verse is slept on (probably because you're the most experienced in the group) but I really, really like this. Good job, Geno.

[J.R.]

Thanks man! That's what I was going for, but if you just look at it without the " 'em " on the end, it fits a lot better lol.

Appreciate the feed.

I see what you mean Yeah, you deserve that Ego you got.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Damnn This was awesome dude, probably the best one I have read so far today. The multis were amazing I think you kept 5 or more syllables through the majority of this piece. Cool topic too, Not much i can say to help you out lol. Awesome piece dude keep it up!

[Mr.DGAF]

Pretty much everything everyone else has said. Good verse, rhyming was tight as always. Only complaint is the first line, the 2nd "I" in "I up and I disappear" seems redundant. I get that it was added for flow and whatnot, but that kind of threw me off.

[Slim Fiasco]

Great job Geno, I loved the vocabulary! That line that name quoted was my favorite as well, and I also liked the rhyming. This little line here too, maybe it didn't stand out from the verse, but cool choice of words:

Stumbled upon a ped and pad on the road south to the wastelands

[SG.]

For fuck's sake, Geno, can you put out a bad piece for once? You're making us look bad..

Great vocabulary throughout, excellent rhymes, so good job.

[Emadyville]

Loved the ending, other than that the content seemed all over the place and was hard to follow as a verse. Loved the first 2 lines tho, def made me laugh