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Geno - Seven (Fiasco Day 3)

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Re: Geno - Seven (Fiasco Day 3)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 21st, '12, 02:49

I like this, I was tinkering with this idea too. I heard it in a song once, from that illmaculate guy I'm trying to get everyone to listen to (and failing, it appears haha). But yeah, I like this man. The concept is good, and you did a good job executing it. The first line was awesome to say haha.
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Geno - Seven (Fiasco Day 3)

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 21st, '12, 03:27

Wow, dude the flow on this was awesome!! and a very creative idea I have never heard anything like that, maybe i'll look up illmaculate and find it, but wow, the rhyming was crazy there were so many inners and multis awesome dude!! loved this piece! keep it up.
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Re: Geno - Seven (Fiasco Day 3)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Jun 21st, '12, 10:33

Damn, that was dope!! The beat you've picked is dope and it goes well with the lyrics, the rhyming was as always excellent, especially the last several lines when you had here/fear/year popping up in the begging of the lines. I also liked that short alliteration with rugged rhymes, it sounded excellent. Needless to say, the concept itself was great as well. Great job!
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Re: Geno - Seven (Fiasco Day 3)

Postby Emadyville » Jun 23rd, '12, 20:58

Damn, that ending was dope! Good piece. Loved the rhymes and especially the beginning rhymes near the end ( career, here, fear, year) it just made the flow and rhymes overall stand out, good shit
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