Geno - Porno (Fiasco Day 5)

[Mr.DGAF]

Haha, I was thinking I'd be the only dude dropping on the day it was my topic.

[Mr.DGAF]

Haha, this topic. I figured there'd be some crazy stuff from somebody, and I guess I was right. This was tight, I really liked the line about making it a kids film so virgins would see it haha. But yeah, this was cool. The first like 6 lines really paint a picture. Kinda gross, but still a vivid picture.

[Slim Fiasco]

Haha, this was awesome Geno. Some very nice choice of words. Favorite line was 'A comedy slash novelty porn-hobby, she's screwed". I loved how it sounded. Great job!

[Emadyville]

Rhymes were sick, loved the internals. Content was spot on, funny, and bizarre in an awesome way. Good fuckin drop, loved the vocab on this as well

[SliK]

I got the flow on the second go and it was flawless. I found it actually helped with your rhymes, to keep on beat I found I had to speed up the last few words which helped the syllables blend together nicely in the last four lines:

I oughta be true while talkin' to you, just keep it real,
But I thought it'd be cool to falter and spew such evil skill,
But people still don't see the talent, so fuck it, go to the cinema,
And tell your son to cover his eyes, like when I'm givin' fucks.

I liked the multils, I like stretching multies out and stuff, and I notice you are good at rhyming bars. I particularly liked:

I oughta be true while talkin' to you, just keep it real,
But I thought it'd be cool to falter and spew such evil skill,

I found your content lacked a little to encorproate the multis, which will always happen, but sometimes you get great multies that just flow, like you think of a rhyme scheme and its like those words were meant to be rhymed together. I thought exacttly that when you rhymed "masturbating to it" with "Ejaculate my fluids".

Over all I liked it, but in a piece like this I would have liked to see more comedy and less intense rhyming, since it was obviously meant to be a comedic piece. Sometimes you just have to sacrafice a few of those rhymes so you can say some more interesting things (not to say this wasn't interesting).

Obviously it was a good piece, 7.5/10 on an overall scale, which I hope you understand is a compliment. I have seen you drop 10s so I'm not saying it as a backhanded compliment or anything, 7.5 is a compliment. I understand you are dropping one a day at the moment so they aren't always going to be 10s and if I was to factor in the rate at which you were dropping them it would easily be an 8.5.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Lol this was great Geno, the rhyming was crazy good, a lot of inners and multis in there which I love reading! I liked how you executed the concept, you did it very good also it was pretty funny to read! great job!

[SliK]

Not a problem. If you get time could you please feed my newest piece? I don't drop often so when I do I would like to get as many responses as possible (for feedback, soni can learn where to improve)..

No hurry though.

[Arabian Shady]

Haha definitely found myself laughin to this one.
I digg the flow too, went nicely with the beat.
Sweet post!