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Bigray - Choppy Flow

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Re: Bigray - Choppy Flow

Postby Spyder » Dec 18th, '12, 02:30

wasnt too bad man, lots a multies which isnt bad or good at certain times. here it was obvious point of the piece. the second line through the flow off a lil bit as you messed up the couplet end rhyme. other than that i double-timed it in my head and it sounded great.
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Re: Bigray - Choppy Flow

Postby Slim Fiasco » Dec 29th, '12, 10:36

Yeah, I think the flow was kinda good, and I believe I picked up on it, haha. Good lookin' out with the rhyming!
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