Enemy Of The People

[Slim Fiasco]

I’m enemy of the people and friend of the state
The only reason being is that I want Lupe to hate
Back in high-school girls said that I wasn’t cute
So I took a hammer and put those bitches to mute
I have your girlfriend’s name tattoed on my chest
Followed by “this is the groupie I had laying to rest”
I’m inviting Noam Chomsky to my dream party
Who do you have – Zac Efron or Jesse McCartney?
I hate each and every rapper outside my Top 10
And I’m killing anybody who they consider a fan
My life is more cartoonish than Borderlands 2
But that doesn’t mean I won’t be shooting at you
You look uglier than a retarded Sphynx with AIDS
Run over by a truck and stabbed with several blades
Shout-out to my people – the devil and the 7 sins
I made Adam rape Eve and haven’t been to heaven since


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[Sam.]

I really like the content. Bars were short and easy for me to flow to it, but there should have been more multis. One more, there are some words that are too big, and I feel that they are just too much. I know that they suit what they are supposed to mean in the verse, but, um, nah, it's cool.

[Slim Fiasco]

I really like the content. Bars were short and easy for me to flow to it, but there should have been more multis. One more, there are some words that are too big, and I feel that they are just too much. I know that they suit what they are supposed to mean in the verse, but, um, nah, it's cool.

Thanks for the feedback man. The thing with multies is that I don't feel the need to add them so i'm more focused on the content. You may be right abouut the big words thing though.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

good piece dude, as sam said, work on the multis, everything else seems to be pretty good! your still improving keep it up

[Slim Fiasco]

good piece dude, as sam said, work on the multis, everything else seems to be pretty good! your still improving keep it up

Thanks bro!

[Sam.]

What I feel is, Multis add to the betterment of the flow.

[Slim Fiasco]

What I feel is, Multis add to the betterment of the flow.

That's true, but it can also take away from the content and I'd rather not have that happen. I do keep an eye for multi opportunities though. Like with that seven sins line, I immediately thought of heaven since so it happened naturally. But yeah, I think it comes down to preference, and I do appreciate your advice, not saying that you're wrong or anything

I really liked this and it flowed very easily for me. The content was nice too and it rhymed well, you kept it simple.

Thanks bro!

[Sam.]

Yup, never compromise content for a multi. That's what Eminem did.