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Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Aug 6th, '12, 20:27

Haha I like this. I especially like the rhyme scheme Menzo pulled in the first verse. Not to say Geno didn't come right, causehe did. I like the way you said "bulbous rigid bum" haha, that's a string of words I'll probably never hear again. Overall, good job guys. Did a good job of progressing the story and keeping me entertained.

But you took our color scheme for the next battle hahaha. Gold/Purple rocks. Oh well.
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby J.R. » Aug 6th, '12, 20:31

Lmao at the color scheme, My eye was hurting today, fuck you guys , (kidding of course)

But you guys did well. I kind of agree with DGAF, Menzo's scheme was dope,

but both verses were great. I like it.

Which one of you fuckers took away the joy of editing the Tr Shady Tape post from my ipod? :laughing:
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Eedee » Aug 6th, '12, 21:32

Yeah Geno! WTF?? You stole our color scheme, bastard! :8)

But in seriousnizzzz, this was dope. I loved Menzo's first verse the most. Rhymes were sick. Geno you did great too but I just liked Menzo's part more. :y:

Great drop. Geno, we'll get started on "Closing Fuck-You's" whenever this tourney gets done. Should be a fun one to do.
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Atone » Aug 6th, '12, 22:15

this reminded me of that bad meets evil track, the rhyming was amazing, i almost clicked out after the 1st line cuz i thought this was a club style track but damn, i'm gladi kept reading, i love how you ended it, although, i kinda figured you were plannin on killin her.

only part i didn't like was the chorus
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Sam. » Aug 6th, '12, 23:56

Ego with the fine story telling, cool. To be honest, I'm not impressed by the content. I feel that it has been exploited way too many times. I remember you guys doing a track in this similar fashion. Only thing that was different was the fact that, that piece had a deep story line and was very complex to understand. I remember arguing on it a lot about the bars and that it would have been dope if it was direct... I'm not ruling out the grace that this piece of work had. Each one of you added some to the whole thing. Like Menzo's rhyming and phrasing was the added charm to his verse. On the other hand, Geno had simplicity to his verse. I'm really sorry, I didn't enjoy this that much. Even though technically this very sound, the content didn't drive me insane like SOME of your earlier pieces. You guys can work it out, definitely, I'm sure.
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Sam. » Aug 7th, '12, 22:23

Basically you guys lure her to your place to dine and she ends up being a Rotisserie. This one word explained the whole song to me. Basic feel is same: Get hold of a unfaithful/ innocent/ hot and sexy chick kill/rape/slice her. The topic has been done a lot of times, not exactly by Ego, but yeah. The other piece also involved a bitch (Sorry for the poor choice of word). If I remember correctly, she ends up in a car and dumped in a lake or some shit. I forgot, lol. It is not like your other songs, agreed, but the basic character is same and and both of you are connected to her in some way. That's the only similarity. What you did with them(characters), is what sets this apart from your other pieces.
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Sam. » Aug 7th, '12, 23:38

Go ahead. :(
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Sam. » Aug 7th, '12, 23:41

Why?
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Sam. » Aug 7th, '12, 23:48

Yes, of course. I read it twice after you comment. If I'm the one not getting the true meaning behind your verses; why not explain and end my misinterpretation. I posted what I felt about it, I'm not correct everytime, you know? No one is.
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Amaranthine » Aug 11th, '12, 21:05

:laughing:
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Sam. » Aug 11th, '12, 23:56

Amaranthine wrote::laughing:

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Great feed.
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Sam. » Aug 12th, '12, 00:19

Who the fuck is Tiffany? ^^
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Amaranthine » Aug 12th, '12, 01:08

Geno wrote:
Amaranthine wrote::laughing:

LOL what'd you think of it?

It was hilarious. Obviously.
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby Amaranthine » Aug 12th, '12, 01:13

No, I'm so offended. I hate you. :'(
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Re: Ego - The Roast (TR Shady Tape #2)

Postby 12characters » Aug 12th, '12, 02:38

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