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Re: You Already Got A Man

Postby CanadaPure » Feb 1st, '13, 21:13

Menzo wrote:I liked it.

The dominant rhyme scheme was audibly enjoyable and it was fun to read along with what you were talking about. Would like to see more, no real criticisms - just hope to see some more, longer drops in the future.


I'm trying to get him on something. If there's one thing I'm good at, it's making people longer. :shifty:
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Re: You Already Got A Man

Postby CanadaPure » Feb 1st, '13, 21:19

Menzo wrote:
Same.


Yeah, uh, that's what I meant too! Yes it is! :whistle:
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Re: You Already Got A Man

Postby Kill You » Feb 1st, '13, 22:45

Yeah I love the multis. Don't mind the content. It needed to be longer though.
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Re: You Already Got A Man

Postby EvryOnesACrtc » Feb 2nd, '13, 19:50

Menzo wrote:I liked it.

The dominant rhyme scheme was audibly enjoyable and it was fun to read along with what you were talking about. Would like to see more, no real criticisms - just hope to see some more, longer drops in the future.


Thanks for the feed, man. I admire your skills, so it's really a huge compliment from you. Any constructive feedback that you give I'd def. utilize.

As for my drops being short, I, and this probably applies to most people on this forum, have a really short attention span lol anytime I see a loonngg verses, I don't bother reading them. Or if I do read them, it takes a lot of effort from me haha that's why I like to keep mine short.
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