Eedee - "Trickling Blood" (with audio demo)

[Eedee]

LoF
Beat

AUDIO DEMO

*I may make this a full song... depends on how everyone likes it. I'm in a stump with writing, tbh.

[Verse 1] (:37)
Through the crack of the door I see an arm drop
You are back here for more, I feel my heart stop.
But every time I go around the middle man, I get these thoughts
That we are the fucking worst, cuz we keep on
Doing this, moving bricks, but ask me if I fucking care
It's useless to keep trying, but there's nothing there.
There's nothing to feel as I see the fingers lash out
And hit the floor with lifeless intent, it's a glass house.
Do I back out? Who the FUCK do I ask now?
I rap 'bout my feelings but EVERYONE seems to bash how
I scatter the images of the pictures and I see things
I'm dreaming of the dignity I have left to leave with.
The door creaks, and more dreams fill my aching head
But my sanity's expelled in this wave of dread.
But as I see the wrist droop, it's you who comes with it
The pain I whistle is in tune ... the blood trickles.

[tadpole25]

I'm just trying to get a sense of the flow here.

I recorded your verse over the beat to see if I got it right

http://vocaroo.com/i/s17vEIbmXwCE

The quality is bad and I only gave it one try, but it's fun trying out other people's flows.

[Eedee]

Sorry, no... that's not it lol

I'll record a demo really quick and upload it to YouTube lol

[Eedee]

Tadpole, I updated the OP with an audio demo.

AUDIO DEMO

[Mr.DGAF]

No offense homie but that's the purpose of the demo, flow only mane.

I'll check when I get home dawg.

[Eedee]

Thanks DGAF. Ea UES. Yes.

Geno, yeah... this was only a demo. I'm not gonna put hours into perfecting the punch-ins/delivery. It was only for flow like DGAF said. But you said you liked it other than the delivery, so yay :3

[Eedee]

Word. I was just trying to find something I didn't like so I was nitpicking to help you lol.

It was dope overall.

Hahahahahaha thanks man.

And I promise the delivery will be better on the final version (which I'm making... fuck ya'll. This track is getting made bitch).

<3

[Eedee]

Why'd you have to go done and say that yo?

[Mr.DGAF]

Dope dope dope flow. I liked it man, the flow was quick which is something you don't do often. I think you nailed it. Loved the scheme of the first few bars. Good shit dawg, can't wait to hear the full version.

[PAINKILLƎR]

I thought it was dope, aside from some parts sounding sloppy like Geno said I think its great, I can't wait to hear the finish product.

[Eedee]

Thanks my dawgs.