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Project Y Not

Postby Just Silver » Feb 23rd, '13, 01:52

feed- JR Erupting Eyes *copy n paste plz

Bankrupt from dank puffed, a wonderful life
Cant budge ,wont move, what a hell of a night
Woke up sober, needed some closure
Found someones clothes here, and some cold beers
The weird part about it no one goes here
Or comes into comas when the party is over
Got my diploma smokin piff took soma hits
Fearing old age is it how i never noticed it
Forgetfulness first step from regretfulness
Started from the bottom and im still here
Problem after problem never solved them
And theres spilled beer all over never sober
My eyes stay closed so parties never over
No balloons just drugs and all the loot
That was transact from this mans trap
Like Gucci but my spot hot like a jacuzzi
Cant act like a part of a movie or get rollin
Like doobies just make sure its potent
Now know this, the code is , five oh shit
The whole party dipped screamin like an audience
Stripped teens and arguments runnin outta garments
Didnt even notice the police department part of it
Slept it off to call it quits a dream is what id call the shit
Never wanted it, to end so abruptly,suddenly
Had no guns on me luckily so nothin stuck to me
As in charges, as im pleading the fifth
Car alarms, and the weed was all piff
Im speaking all stiff ,dont find the stash
Cant believe i finally remember the past
Last night was a blast but almost got caught
Smashed off a glass and a dash of the pot
May i pray to the sunday mass i never get locked
So here i am go tell another day
Every lyric is pride covered shame..

im still here..
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Re: Project Y Not

Postby Just Silver » Feb 24th, '13, 01:51

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Re: Project Y Not

Postby Mr.DGAF » Feb 25th, '13, 01:08

I liked this. The way you write is cool, the schemes pop up and then reappear a little later in the bars. It takes some skill to pull it off, sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. I think it was Amadeo that said that you eventually forget that the scheme was there to begin with. I think the only time I felt like that was the spilled beer scheme. No biggie though, I like searching through to find all the schemes and whatnot.

You've been dropping solid verses man, I'd suggest putting them together or something. Drop something with more than one verse you know?
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Project Y Not

Postby Just Silver » Feb 25th, '13, 01:17

Mr.DGAF wrote:I liked this. The way you write is cool, the schemes pop up and then reappear a little later in the bars. It takes some skill to pull it off, sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. I think it was Amadeo that said that you eventually forget that the scheme was there to begin with. I think the only time I felt like that was the spilled beer scheme. No biggie though, I like searching through to find all the schemes and whatnot.

You've been dropping solid verses man, I'd suggest putting them together or something. Drop something with more than one verse you know?

thanks guy :smoking: guy i have been switchin up styles lately

and ya ill have a lil something in the near future :b:
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Re: Project Y Not

Postby Just Silver » Feb 27th, '13, 03:54

Bumpin cause theres nothin to really feed recently
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