No More Mr. Nice Guy

[Atone]

(Verse)
I guess i'm that Mr. Nice Guy
Mr. treat er right, never make a lady cry
Mr. help a friend, always lend a hand
BUT I WANNA BE MR. DON'T GIVE A DAMN
fuck your tears, fuck all your damn pain
cry to me all the time, it's a damn shame
expectin me to be there for you all the time
make me feel like i'm losin my damn mind
and if i can't help, it's a damn crime
Mr. Your an asshole, Mr. You Don;t Care
Mr. When you need me you aint ever there
how about that time i actually gave a fuck
your daddy threw you out, i gave you twenty bucks
ciggerettes and Soda pop, i was there when you cried
gave you my shoulder i was right there by your side
even tho you cheated i still wanted to be ya buddy
even tho i had to see ya actin slutty
truth is i was there when it got ugly
and there were times when i just wanted to say
FUCK YOU BITCH and just walk away
and then time came when shoe's were on the other foot
tables turned, there was a time when i was really shook
and when i reached out, you pulled your hand back
turned a cold shoulder, and i'll never understand that
but i aint gonna cry about it, i shoulda known not to trust you
Broke my heart twice, i shoulda known not to love you
but now your gone from my life so now it's BITCH FUCK YOU


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[Sam.]

Loved the content, but it could have been more dramatic, if you ask me. Try and get out of your comfort zone and try your hand at multis and complex phrasing, this is way too simple. Learn to complicate things like the situation you're talking about in your verse. It's typical-atone-material. Don't do that. Try and branch out and try different topics apart from troubled relations.