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Keystyle Scientist

Postby Just Silver » May 17th, '13, 02:44

Lof: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=159335

lots of hidden meanings and shit find the stuff a quick keystyle
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Off the top like a pissed Hispanic barber ,cut a little sharper
Fist in the tongue, in which i write and wrote, visions alter
Spoke on the mission despite my foes have fallen
Never stallin like the car with the pollen, in the garage never startin
But my starter repeats,dope with the flow till its a part of my speech
In an everyday means,discussion, meeting boards
discuss it like nothing is something, till paper sheets on floors
And i make a score like a sport, but they're sore from the sorts
Of pure force, thats pure scorched ,like Johnny with a torch
Kamikaze at the courts, bombs on me, no remorse
And of course ,im off course, like fuck a neighbors porch
Waste a house, off the market now im right back in jail where i shoulda started
Label me as a target like a cheap shirt, they need work such as feed first
Havent really got any inspection in my indirection maybe ill test it
Compress it in seconds off mental recollection and invest it
with my presence, as a lyrical menace like Dennis
Hopper over, bitch joggers dog her cat till it rains often
Strained boston baked feel drained but dont complain
High and over pain like Max insanely spat fuck facts
Relax while i threelax off speed weed and anthrax
I run laps then relapse take three caps then collapse on thee track
Speed that shit back , rewind while i re win that
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby PAINKILLƎR » May 17th, '13, 19:22

This was really good guy. Lots of rhymes, flow was nice. Some dope lines in ther too. Really rigged the piece good drop mane.
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Just Silver » May 17th, '13, 19:23

PAINKILLƎR wrote:This was really good guy. Lots of rhymes, flow was nice. Some dope lines in ther too. Really rigged the piece good drop mane.

Thanks guy for the feed
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Halftongue Dre » May 17th, '13, 20:20

Dope my brother keep writing
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Just Silver » May 18th, '13, 11:48

Thanks broski just waiting for another TR cypher and i have a full song i need to work on
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Just Silver » May 28th, '13, 01:11

Bump then I'm working on something new :y:
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Francesco » May 29th, '13, 14:42

Another good one... It looks like you're on a roll, keep them coming. :y:
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Just Silver » May 29th, '13, 14:47

Thanks guy :y: there's a Collab in the works
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Sam. » May 29th, '13, 21:55

Verse lacked consistency. It's didn't touch the finish line in the pace in which it originally started. You got off to a very impressive start but didn't end well. The ending lines were good none the less, but seemed to have lost the vigor that it had earlier. Maybe you wrote this in sessions or something, I don't know. They felt a tad bit rushed, if I may say. Till now I was talking about the content, okay?

About the technicalities and other BS, you did a very good job on that. Although multis could have been done with more syllables in consideration, but that's all on you as to how you wanna do it. Don't always aim for using inner multis, try and make the end rhyme deeper. Practice. You've improved leaps and bound, nigga. That's a good thing.

Phrasing was outstanding during the 1st half and some of the lines really stood out well. Keep at it.

Another complain: Watch out how you place your end rhymes like here -

"Waste a house, off the market now im right back in jail where i shoulda started
Label me as a target like a cheap shirt, they need work such as feed first
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Keep slayin 'em. :y:
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Just Silver » May 29th, '13, 22:03

Thanks for the feed guy i only saved once then went back but it was a keystyle

Meaning i started non stop each starting point

I experiment with different flow that's the main reason my ending rhymes are weird

Thanks though best feed yet :y:
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Sam. » May 29th, '13, 22:06

Just saw the title properly, my bad, JS.
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Francesco » May 30th, '13, 11:02

Just Silver wrote:Thanks guy :y: there's a Collab in the works


You're welcome.
Bring it on... I'll support it as well.
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Re: Keystyle Scientist

Postby Just Silver » Jun 2nd, '13, 00:48

Hesky wrote:
Sam. wrote:Verse lacked consistency. It's didn't touch the finish line in the pace in which it originally started. You got off to a very impressive start but didn't end well. The ending lines were good none the less, but seemed to have lost the vigor that it had earlier.


Beat me to it. :y:

I can somewhat see meaning/cohesiveness in the first 11 bars, but the last 11 just didn't hit home with me. Either I can't interpret/decipher them, or they don't make any sense?Image
This started off brilliantly, though.

Edit: Just got a couple in the latter part I was confused about (I think)

Is the Boston baked one referring to yourself and your location? Then the over pain like Max is a play on words referring to Max Payne?

Thanx for the feed the Boston line refers to location and that i was high

Yes that max payne line is correctly interpreted

All the lines make sense if u have any trouble ask me the lines you had trouble with
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