Bigray - He's Back (Freestyle)

[PAINKILLƎR]

Had some over nice lines and rhymes. But some end rhymes didn't rhyme and that kinda jacked up the flow. It was good for a freestyle and cool keeping CW active. Good drop.

[Snakebeast]

Had some fantastic multis and lines, however, lines like this kind of sounded really screwy in my head:

"Hakuna Matata I lion like Mufasa"

That sounded very forced, imo.

I lay em’ flat like a bulldozer, Hulk Hogan
I can poke boulders leave em’ with the skull broken

I loved this line though. Maybe you could add "like" before "Hulk Hogan". Don't want to sound like Wayne.

[Just Silver]

Pretty decent as a whole and i as well need to do more keystyles
Improvement in punches and delivery

Overall a nice quick piece and i haven't forgotten our PK Collab lol
And i still have shit for the Tr tape but no ones updating me :/

[Spyder]

this all flowed well, it all rhymed with a certain accent applied in some parts lol.
some not bad lines in there.
making good progress man

[PAINKILLƎR]

Not really, at times in Hip Hop rappers change the pronunciation of words and syllables to match the other words/syllables in order for them to rhyme. So if you wanna do it its okay just don't over do it.

[Halftongue Dre]

I need somewhere to write the multi cypher and topical rhymes is like a ghost town its just me n snake for the past 3 days n not much else. Can someone get us started on a new fresh branch where all us writers can go to daily and read and write new shit? We need more writers or somethin cause no one wants to jump in with me or maybe I just don't entice any competitors lol

[Halftongue Dre]

By the way Bigray that verse was dope man, it all flowed and it came out good. I can't really critique it much cause I didn't spot anything I didn't like. You should come to the multi cypher or topical rhymes section and get some more out. I could use the competition bruh. Keep writing though good stuff.

[Halftongue Dre]

For sure man. If you got time you should drop some stuff in the multi cypher or topical rhymes sections. Its desolate as fuck man I need you haha

[Halftongue Dre]

Dope man. Maybe you should drop it in the multi cypher because you can write more in that section. The topical rhymes is just 4 to 8 bars.