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Re: bigray - Slut

Postby Just Silver » Jun 5th, '13, 00:03

Nice story telling i could flow to a T

Concept was decent but what stood out was imagery and flow which imo is most important

Gets a little choppy once she arrives at the club but wasn't bad

I liked it short and sweet
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Re: bigray - Slut

Postby Francesco » Jun 5th, '13, 11:21

It was nice & the rhymes kinda stood up but I couldn't really pick up the tempo & couldn't flow along... Still nice overall! :y:
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Re: bigray - Slut

Postby Sam. » Jun 5th, '13, 20:50

Okay verse. Tried out content but the presentation covers it up. Flowing through this reminded me of Big Poppa by Biggie Smalls. Decent drop.
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