Anger Management

[Snakebeast]

Feedback: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=161016&p=2208402#p2208402
Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9iNlAT9BLzo

My school is totally filled with rich white kids
Who think they can rap, but could never spit like this
And if they heard me, they wouldn't get my shit
Then again, they wouldn't get a punchline if they got hit by it

Faggot ass swaggots wearing their snapbacks backward
I'd wish they all had their skulls smashed, cracked, splattered
Mashed brain matter that don't think rap skill matters
Thin ass crackers with their stupid "swag" black shirt (Yolo!)

But I listened to where is the love by the Black Eyed Piss
Maybe I should just calm down, and not rap like this
Nah, fuck it, Street Light and Dan Bull deserve fame
Not that failure Lil Wayne with his sizzurp brain (How to loooove)

While I have control over my anger, I still have tantrums
I have no control over those, they all still come at random
But they come more often when I see those swaggots spitting
And getting rich of it when my shit's rawer than a steak on Hell's Kitchen (IT'S RAW!!)

[Snakebeast]

Bump. Come on, guyz, I need some feedback D:

[Francesco]

I laughed at the first two lines... lol
I like the structure & the rhyming & flow. Good one overall!

[Snakebeast]

Thanks for the feedback, dude ^_^ Much appreciated.

[Sam.]

The general rule is feed other to get feed in return, but whatever.

The rhymes were mostly from some or the other Eminem song, like the 1st verse was like "Ain't Nothing But Music". Content was pretty basic, decent enough though. I kinda liked. Could've been more creative. Practice the basics more, man.

[Snakebeast]

The general rule is feed other to get feed in return, but whatever.

The rhymes were mostly from some or the other Eminem song, like the 1st verse was like "Ain't Nothing But Music". Content was pretty basic, decent enough though. I kinda liked. Could've been more creative. Practice the basics more, man.

I was hoping someone would notice that. I heard the song again, saw how he rhymed it, then instantly thought of other words to rhyme with it. I tried not to copy any rhymes and make my own tho

I understand the creativity part. I was kind of just fucking around with rhymes and this pooped out, so I decided to put it on here :3

I appreciate the feedback :3

[Sam.]

Yeah, it pretty obvious if you're a vivid listner like me.