Anjealous

[Block]

New song I'm working on. Haven't written anything since I can't record at the moment.. But I wrote this verse today.

I fed class's piece.


You're finding yourselves naked in a snowstorm
Working to the bone so that you can try to know warmth...
No warmth is available to you and her,
The universe smiles on the mouths of the truly versed
Chewing words down not to sound like you rehearsed
(truly hurts), she only loves you with the lights off,
Overly submissive when her sight's gone
(blinded by a siren with a smile and the right song)
Now you keep the lights on, hiding from the shame
Wide awake, it's ironic... You're dying in a grave
Try & save any pieces of the puzzle you can hustle
With the city skyline dialogue up above you,
(she could never love you)...
violin violence in a struggle with the strings,
You can only be a couple til the puppet grows wings
And brings you an island to sink..
I'd learn to sing but the silence is louder than me
And the sink where I drowned out that island is cheap,
It cracks.. It's known to leak...
And there's a little known secret that is known to me...

(hook)


I haven't finished the hook.

[classthe_king]

I loved this dude. Expecially this part

violin violence in a struggle with the strings,
You can only be a couple til the puppet grows wings

That part was fantastic.

I feel like I can appreciate your writtens a lot more now, can't wait to hear when you can record

[Block]

Thanks, man. Reading your piece inspired me to write something of my own.

[Block]

Ehh..ba

[B.A.D.]

fantastic

[MikeNUFC]

You're definitely my favourite writer on here. Your word choice and structure is just so excellent, feels so well crafted.

Internal rhyming was fantastic, with no forcing at all.

And you have some really poetic lines... loved this:

The universe smiles on the mouths of the truly versed
Chewing words down not to sound like you rehearsed
(truly hurts), she only loves you with the lights off,
Overly submissive when her sight's gone

This would sound so epic recorded.

[Block]

You're definitely my favourite writer on here. Your word choice and structure is just so excellent, feels so well crafted.

Internal rhyming was fantastic, with no forcing at all.

And you have some really poetic lines... loved this:

The universe smiles on the mouths of the truly versed
Chewing words down not to sound like you rehearsed
(truly hurts), she only loves you with the lights off,
Overly submissive when her sight's gone

This would sound so epic recorded.

Thanks alot, bro.

[Block]

. Wow I didn't remember this. Up so I can find it later.

[Sam.]

Yup. Slept on like anything. This is classic stuff. It's better than 90% of verses on here.

[Mr.DGAF]

Haha yeah I was gonna feed this earlier but I figure he bumped it only to keep it in his mind. If you're really looking for fees, this is dope. Seems real smooth and effortless. The lines class quoted are my favorite by far.