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My loyalty lyrics snippet

Postby Ethos » Jul 24th, '06, 07:54

How loyal are you to your entire country?
Fucking redneck punk bitch sucking dick on his bum knees
Saying "my fellow Americans" to all the people that put up with your shit
But i'm 14 years old and i don't play that type of shit.
My eyes can see clear, i see through all your dumbass lies
In the back of your mind your hoping that all our soldiers die
fighting a war your father created cuz your too lazy to fight
em was right strap him with an AK and put him in iraqi sights
then we'll really see if he gives a damn for america
hear the bells? see they're ringing for ya



(That's just a snippet of my first verse. It'll get better as i complete it. But hey not bad for my first time right? Could have been worse. :p O leave comments. tell me how i can improve it if you can.)
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Postby FTW » Jul 24th, '06, 20:30

that was good man
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Postby katastrophe » Jul 24th, '06, 21:17

very good =D> bush sucks
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Postby polluted » Jul 25th, '06, 03:37

isnt there sposed to be a few more rhymez?
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Postby Ethos » Jul 25th, '06, 04:02

polluted wrote:isnt there sposed to be a few more rhymez?



It's a snippet. It's supposed to end in the middle of a verse.
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Postby DC4952 » Jul 25th, '06, 04:37

Very good man, that'll go good with my piano beat.
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Postby polluted » Jul 25th, '06, 04:51

Syanied wrote:
polluted wrote:isnt there sposed to be a few more rhymez?



It's a snippet. It's supposed to end in the middle of a verse.




aittt, in Brits English snippet means p*ssy flaps....lol
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