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State Of Mind

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State Of Mind

Postby Rae » Aug 21st, '06, 17:32

i remember as a little girl,
i wanted a huge house with a white fence,
and within that withe picket fence,
would live me and my prince,
but sadly the world isnt like that,
in the real world,
my fate is ... ,
livin in the ghetto,
with a minimum wage job at catos,
and as far as a prince goes in my book,
that would define any guy,
who would keep a job so we could split tha rent,
i would give anything to go back to tha days when i was 5,
so i cold get back my innoscent state of mind.


i also know this one isnt great ... but i was kinda pissed when i wrote it ... so i am completely aware that this one sucks :D
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Postby stevethetruth » Aug 21st, '06, 20:03

hey if it'll make you feel better i'll be the prince lol

i liked this one too keep it up and oh yeah one camera is better than none if you know what i mean
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Postby Rae » Aug 21st, '06, 20:07

steverocks88 wrote:hey if it'll make you feel better i'll be the prince lol

i liked this one too keep it up and oh yeah one camera is better than none if you know what i mean



oh yeah i get it now ... lol ... yeah and u bein my prince would make me feel betta! :whistle: lol
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 21st, '06, 20:21

the rythm aint that great but i like the topic and the lyrics :d nice work
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Postby Rae » Aug 21st, '06, 20:29

thanx ... it was like ... 2:30am when i wrote it ... i was tired ... what can i say ... but thanx 4 tha feedback!! :D
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