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Postby ThomasAguanis » Sep 4th, '06, 01:39

this is from before this summer and i just found the lyrics when cleaning my desk today and im gonna record it so i retyped the lyrics so they're easier to read. i wrote this with no structure just on the front and back of a piece of loose leaf so i tried to put it into some structure. anywho.. any feedback would be great and the recorded veraion may be posted here soon or saved for a later project:

Insert name here, revert your brains fears, the same gears that tell you pains near/
you lame queers get worked up this quick, this shit
B.K.A. The King of Kale A.K.A. The Superfood Sensai
I still rap better than you.

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Postby Block » Sep 4th, '06, 05:43

add a nice hook and it'd be sick. nice drop tho.
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 4th, '06, 14:16

really good man :D has everything :d lke k sayed sweet hook and its perfect
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Postby rhiannon » Sep 4th, '06, 15:19

tom is great lmao!

it was good i liked it alot...nice work :flower:
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Sep 4th, '06, 18:04

k block wrote:add a nice hook and it'd be sick. nice drop tho.

Bar wrote:really good man :D has everything :d lke k sayed sweet hook and its perfect

thanks a lot guys. i dont think im gonna add a hook cause i dont think it'd fit well in the song. it's basically a 3 minute song of 1 long verse(in 1 recording..thats why it may take a while to do) so a hook wouldnt sound right..well at least thats what im thinking.


rhiannon wrote:tom is great lmao!

it was good i liked it alot...nice work :flower:


thanks a lot :flower:
glad you liked it.
oh and the audio will be better. ;)
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