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Re: 10 Lines

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 18th, '06, 21:42

Clarky wrote:When I rhyme, I make your sylables flee 'coz I'm as ill as can be,
A million bees can't make a buzz or sting as killer as me,
An iller MC would be diagnosed with multiple diseases,
I bring Hip Hop to UK like I'm a cultural adhesive,
I release these raps faster than a fat bastard opening a chocoalte bar,
I rock it as hard as a NASA mission toppin' the stars,
Droppin' a bar harder than an alcohlic pissed as fuck,
I spit fire so much i'll leave you cooked like a crispy duck,
I dissed a crook so bad he actually prefered the jail,
I heard your sick words, mine'll make 'em scared 'n pale.




That's all I done so far. What do you think?


prety nice man this for your FT ?
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Re: 10 Lines

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 18th, '06, 21:45

Clarky wrote:
Bar wrote:
Clarky wrote:When I rhyme, I make your sylables flee 'coz I'm as ill as can be,
A million bees can't make a buzz or sting as killer as me,
An iller MC would be diagnosed with multiple diseases,
I bring Hip Hop to UK like I'm a cultural adhesive,
I release these raps faster than a fat bastard opening a chocoalte bar,
I rock it as hard as a NASA mission toppin' the stars,
Droppin' a bar harder than an alcohlic pissed as fuck,
I spit fire so much i'll leave you cooked like a crispy duck,
I dissed a crook so bad he actually prefered the jail,
I heard your sick words, mine'll make 'em scared 'n pale.




That's all I done so far. What do you think?


prety nice man this for your FT ?


Yep. Thanks.


ill already sent him mine :sweating:

anywae the lyrics look as if they gonni flow good
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 18th, '06, 21:58

Clarky wrote:Lol, that's the hard part IMO.


Making it sound good.


I always struggle lol, I hate my voice.


i went for the EXACT oppisiate

i went for simple but flow perfect.....and idk i thought it was ok steve said it was awsome and maybe said it was good
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 18th, '06, 22:06

nope my feature is for pulse records mixtape :smoking:
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Postby Ka0t1c » Sep 19th, '06, 03:34

what up, the names Kevin McCoy aka KDoG
im from rockford, illinois and i came to claim im
not just another young boy whos come to annoy
naw, im one to deploy cuz i wanna destroy ya fake pages of data
and maybe a lot of chaos i cause for whatever case but youre really a droid
just walk away or we're gonna face off n i wont be able to get away from
once ya caught in a chase cuz no alley is safe once ya body gets traced up
in chalk one of these days fa (for) coming this way out ya boundaries to play
sorry to say but to ya mama all pain runs in her veins
while i am safer than robbing a bank cuz i wasnt caught onto a tape

haha, the cops have delayed response to the call about an hour too late

now copy n paste: tell the others i hate
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Sep 19th, '06, 03:38

great job clarkly
i like the first 2 lines the best. the rest was crazy too :worship:


and KDoG umm whats the point of posting that here? make your own topic man haha
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Re: 10 Lines

Postby Mc Cubz » Sep 19th, '06, 03:51

Clarky wrote:When I rhyme, I make your sylables flee 'coz I'm as ill as can be,
A million bees can't make a buzz or sting as killer as me,
An iller MC would be diagnosed with multiple diseases,
I bring Hip Hop to UK like I'm a cultural adhesive,
I release these raps faster than a fat bastard opening a chocoalte bar,
I rock it as hard as a NASA mission toppin' the stars,
Droppin' a bar harder than an alcohlic pissed as fuck,
I spit fire so much i'll leave you cooked like a crispy duck,
I dissed a crook so bad he actually prefered the jail,
I heard your sick words, mine'll make 'em scared 'n pale.

CHHHHEEEECCCKKKKK CLARKY OUT HAHA

nice work clarky lol I fink its safe to say u have slightly improved since your start of tr.........LOOOOAAAAAADDDDS HAHAAA


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Postby katastrophe » Sep 19th, '06, 05:06

lmao..thats awesome as hell clarky. great job
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^^^Propz to McMaybe :worship:
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Postby Infliction » Sep 19th, '06, 21:40

unbelieveable man, such great creativity and complexity :worship: I loved it.
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