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3 page written frenzy ( killing the culprit )

Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 3rd, '06, 22:12

i wrote this with no structure ill try sort it out , what i did was started writing then when i stopped i was 3 pages into my noteboke and had a swore hand :sweating: lol anywae give feed , i dont write things often ( actualy hand write ) but i liked the outcome lol

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Killing the Culprit

I'm killing the culpri , it hurt it , a didnt squirt it ,
like a bullpit , quick calm collective , i'm affective ,
The culprit telt it , held it , but only i felt it ,
writting this with felt tip , let me tell it ,
this is how a feel , i know i took the reel , a just wanted it to be real,
thought we were strong like steel,
but still, you wear my heart pill , now im paying the bill , like kill ,
emotions swishing so fast , knowing itll never last , weak like paper cast ,
but im under the spell , cant you tell ,
punishing pain whats the purpose , please why must you hurt this ,
i curse this , fuck this , but still no culprite diss ,
only the songs to reminise ,
love, fear, anger, pain, just summed up the game ,
someone make my emotions tame ,
felling like a sky scraper , but crashing like twin tower,
kill he who own the power, why do i although-her,
heaart gonni pop like tart, this is the start ,
gonni shatter , wanne smack-her , in all senses ,
face , wall and bathroom floor , wanne bang like a door,
tough as diamond , but weak at the knees with the ladies ,
im a sucker , dont whant a girl just to fuck her , want a real lover,
aint the muscle , im the hustle,
so much to tell , so much to yell , wait till you hear my views,
they so sick they make you wanne spew ,
lil_bayly go back to rythming like blues clues,
you clueless when it comes to tie shoes,
i'm still killing all the culprits, giving haters the shits,
dont need to punch my wordplay hits , spits ,
lyrical genious like a ping pong , smoke a bong ,
grab a thong , im finished , adios , i'm gone

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the underlines line si becuse i wrote 3 different lines for it coz i read it then scored out and stuff

i had the ones used and also

make a man sick till he spews

make people sick theyll start to sue

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anywae please leave feed thank you :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 4th, '06, 18:01

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Postby stevethetruth » Oct 4th, '06, 18:06

that was wicked good man one of your best i loved the flow in it

keep it up man :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 4th, '06, 18:07

steverocks88 wrote:that was wicked good man one of your best i loved the flow in it

keep it up man :D


woot for feed :smoking:

thx man :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 4th, '06, 20:55

c'mon give feed , i wanna post more stuff but i aint doing it if i aint getting feed :(
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