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Postby rhiannon » Oct 7th, '06, 08:23

wow i liked it....its really good :flower:
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Re: first shit i wrote...

Postby .Giorgo. » Oct 8th, '06, 01:51

Blackheart wrote:this the first shit i wrote on a night, i was fuckin tired and i know that it's crap but i just wanted to post it.

Wakin' up every mornin'
Crawlin' outta bed waitin'
Hopin' for a different fate
Livin' though a life filled with hate
Askin' for somethin' worth livin' for
Fightin' against the pain
Endin' all up to be in vain
Slowly bein' ripped apart
My soul driftin' faster then a go-kart
feelin' like i'm wastin' my life
on somethin' i don't like so i grab a knife
then think about it twice before i drop it
and realize life's to precious to end it...


It's not crap, i like it, a lot.
Mainly the last 3 lines.
Just work a bit on your rhymes and it's a great job.
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Postby yoshi » Oct 8th, '06, 15:08

i like it :8) :)
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Chet wrote:Fuck House. If I wanted to watch a sarcastic person in the medical field, I would stalk Yoshi :8)
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Postby Jay-19 » Oct 8th, '06, 18:03

I like it also! :8)
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Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Oct 8th, '06, 18:23

i like it ...
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