Practice

[Kez]

Elite words, coming at you, and as soon as he's heard
He goes off and tells everybody about "the guy with a bigger mouth than Pete Burns"[/b]
Don't cheat worse because you'll always get found out
You're as fake as somebody dying if you say to them pow pow! (pow pow!)
So if you try to steal my words or say i bite, i'll send bow wow
To come rip a chunk out your leg and let out a loud growl! (OW!)
So remember what happens if you fuck with the Universal Wrecking Crew
Everytime you get ready to freestyle, you rehearse it, check it through!
I used to upload meaningful shit, but i'm through just hurting many who
Would rather live happily, ignore what is true and worse this record proves
That rich women will gladly step on you with their high heel hooves, her fuckin' seven hooves!
Now listen, fuckin' move as with words i let this loose!
Fuck you, it's just luck that you're never stepped up to
And it's luck, too! A fuckin slut wouldn't even fuckin suck you!
I can't rap anymore, i just destroyed english
So i'll just bitch about these gits and annoying bitches!

[Chorus X2]
So if you don't want to hear me
I don't care
So if you don't like me, really
I don't care
If you wished i was more cheery
I don't care
If you think i'm such a puff that i should cheerlead
I don't care

You're so gullible, if a man told you to suck on a hose
You'd do it, and your sperm would have it's luck gone in throws
And the man is straininng so hard, he is stuck on his toes
Don't hate ME, i just tell what's really true, it's just honest so if
You don't want to accept it you can go sniff Lynx
Till you're high enough that you can say with justification this stinks (this stinks!)
When you listen to my record high you might see pink things
And you so high you imagine me as a bodybuilder with thick rings!
Yeah, this fuckin' shit's not justified
If you measure how much i suck how far you can throw me you could chuck me high
But i don't need to hear these idiots fuckin' whine
People'd know if they bit Eminem's lines, so they stuck with mine!
You shouldn't really even bother you're just wasting your time
Your shit looks gay anyway, but it looks gayest with mine
Mind full of rhymes, if you could try and stomach mine
Then you would see the talent, and it pisses me off, even though people tell me i shouldn't mind!

[Chorus X2]
So if you don't want to hear me
I don't care
So if you don't like me, really
I don't care
If you wished i was more cheery
I don't care
If you think i'm such a puff that i should cheerlead
I don't care

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Just some stuff.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

ok got some stuff to say...

rythmings good

hooks ok if it was rapped like a chant itd be good

here what you need to do though

work on structure and flow

structure - same amount of words in the lines and same seguence of rythming the whole way through the rap you change ti to much ,

flow - you forcing some stuff there , you probly know that yourself

overall its practice and good practice and to get better you need good feed lol anywae work on the above but your rythmings kool all i could say about that is tremember you dont always need to be complex rythming sometimes a little more simple but put more meanign into it is better

[Kez]

I know, i'm gonna start working on that.

See, i use complex rhymes to try to get more freaking feedback around here. Dosen't work obviously.

I'll work on it. Next thing i upload will flow better.

Thanks for the feedback.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

I know, i'm gonna start working on that.

See, i use complex rhymes to try to get more freaking feedback around here. Dosen't work obviously.

I'll work on it. Next thing i upload will flow better.

Thanks for the feedback.

lol to get more feedback give everyone else feedback and bump stuff , when practicing practice smaller rythms so ppl dont need to use 10 mintues readig them once they start liking your small rythms theyll spend the time reading the longer ones lol when i practice i only do like a verse ya know