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Retarded (Unfinished)

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Retarded (Unfinished)

Postby Kez » Oct 30th, '06, 23:01

A trip to the hospital for me happens daily
I'd be healthier if my nurse wasn't the fuckin' fattest lady!
I'm Kez, when i write rhymes i'm not right in my head
Police couldn't get me if they found clues forensic science left!
Fuck a paper job, i'll work givin abortions
Get it out wit a Dyson, crush it, let the women just snort 'em!
I think i was dropped on my head as a child
Maybe it has something to do with all my mom's letters she filed
Got a splitting headache, hit with sixteen lead flakes
I set you on fire, then douse you in listerine and let it bake
Cover you in clingfilm then force you to watch a shit film
Then cover you in sellotape an shove you in a lift filled
With substances you don't wanna think of or even want to consider
But the fumes send you stupid and have you jump out a front window!
I hope i can keep living and survive another year
It wasn't my fault i saw a woman and raped her fine old fuckin' deer!

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If you can't tell that this isn't serious, you need life lessons.

Unfinished. Will write more verses/maybe chorus another time.
Last edited by Kez on Oct 30th, '06, 23:16, edited 3 times in total.
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 30th, '06, 23:03

nice man but agiain STRUCTURE AND FLOW!!!!!!!!!

yeh need work on it...apart from that good shit man :smoking:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Oct 30th, '06, 23:25

better flow homie , suppose i shouldnt judge it if its wrote to a beat :sweating:
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Postby C-Game » Oct 31st, '06, 17:36

structure is aight
the flow works i tryed it for lean back instr
nice stuff kez
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