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A Verse I Wote For Mine & Killa's Tape

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Postby stevethetruth » Nov 7th, '06, 17:09

damn that was sick way better than my shit lmao

hope to hear the audio soon dude
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Postby rhiannon » Nov 7th, '06, 17:11

lmao...i like the last 2 lines :laughing:....nice work i like all ya rhymes n shit..ur good at it lmao i always love readn ur shit...nice work clarky :flower:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 7th, '06, 19:50

shits crazy :worship: like the name of the tape aswell , cant wait for it :D

also is that the tape the revenge is sweet goni be on or a different one :unsure:
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Postby yoshi » Nov 7th, '06, 19:55

lmao i like it :8) sickkkk
/I sprayed AK's at parades of gays / - lol @ this one :D

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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 7th, '06, 19:56

G_killa wrote:
Bar wrote:shits crazy :worship: like the name of the tape aswell , cant wait for it :D

also is that the tape the revenge is sweet goni be on or a different one :unsure:


nah that track is planned for my solo tape ...


aww working on 2 tapes lol fuk dat id get confused and put tracks in the wron folder and shit :laughing:
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Re: A Verse I Wote For Mine & Killa's Tape

Postby Mc Cubz » Nov 7th, '06, 21:30

Clarky wrote:It's to the Big Pun instrumental 'Twinz'. Tell me what you think plz, bad or good feedback is appreciated. Btw It's not 100% finished yet, I've still got a few lines to finish.

I make your shit look like it's the pinnacle of wack,
When I spit a lyrical attack, I ridicule your track,
I'm a miracle of rap, I set the standards, upset with slander,
The cassete commander I'm the next to answer,
The slow decrease of classics, by realeasin' smash hits,
Drop so hot you'll melt like a piece of plastic,
'Coz when I'm on the mic, it's no holds barred,
Discard my bars & leave all foes scarred,
I've shown so far my capability,
The ability is killin me, it's like the papers willin' me,
And as long as it's still in me I'm fully prepared to bully your words,
I'd be pullin' nerds if I was as dull as your verbs,
Cold as fuck like a duck with it's last feather,
Sicker than your sister in black leather,
Like bad weather I rap, start spittin then I'm rippin' off the roof,
My lines are too hard for you bite, they'll be chippin' off ya tooth,
I kick the honest truth, unless I've been caned for days,
Coz at the stage of blazin' J's my brains deranged,
I sprayed AK's at parades of gays, I don't like cock and tushi,
I got caught, coz no-one else there had popped a pussy!



haha your getting good lyrically man this is nice - Like to hear a deep track from you but this is a good club set of lyrics well done - yo you need to work on your audio now it was much better on pass the mic than previously so keep workin on dat shit cos dats where you now need to improve on!
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