Full of Change, Feedback please

[Infliction]

I just wrote this the other day, it goes to the full of change instrumental by scott storch, i dont have a title for it yet, id really appreciate feedback. thanks.

Intro)
Man.. what the fuck.. where.. where am I man? What the fuck happend? Yo? Answer me G! Yo wake up, wake up!

(Verse 1)
Get up everyday, not knowing' what to do, I'm fuckin' my life up
Half the time its like, fuck it, I've had enough
And I know I gotta stay tough and pull through, but I'm testin' my capability
People look at me and they see somethin' I'm not
Fuckin' oblivious to the fact that I actually wanna obtain a college degree
Aint that different from what you thought?
I got ambitions in life just like all yall close minded fucks who wanna judge me
But you know what? It dont get to me, I dont hold a grudge G
Why let them get the best of me? I know all they doin' is testin' me
I've grown accoustomed to that shit, soon you gonna see me reach my dreams and aspirations
Then I aint gonna hear no more fuckin' accusations
For bullshit I dint do cuz I got a bad reputation
I'm left in association with the bad kids, labeled as a trouble maker, to some a lost cause
When I got more money than yall earn a year in my pocket a day, you'll stop snappin' ya jaws
You wanna diminish me? Go ahead, it's your loss, I aint gon bring any haters up with me...


(Chorus)
Criticism and hate, the thoughts they have, the things they say
Callin' me broke for the way my mother gets paid
Runnin' up and down these streets everyday tryna make an honest dollar
At the end of the week, I end up with thoughts like why do I even bother....



(Verse 2)
My lifes full of changes, momma's bringin' in all these weird strangers
I'm feelin' threatened like danger, danger!
If I catchu' touchin' my mother I'll fuckin' mame ya
You hearin' the side of me that most people dont see
The bitterness and hostility you show me, it feeds my rage G
Its my resillienece thats gonna get me to where I wanna be
I feel like so many people in my life have abandoned me
Left me alone to fend for myself, Fuck all yall then, I dont need no help
Despite the animosity I gotta face everyday, I still lay back every night and pray
And I know I gotta face the family history, the addiction in my blood
Its not goin away, its not like its fiction B
I've seen the suffering involved, yet I started so young
I know that it was stupid, yet I dont feel dumb
All the pain and suffering has accumulated over my life, I'm bound to blow sometime
I try to let it out in my words when I rhyme
Bt somehow I know deep down it aint gonna stop me forever
One things for sure though, I'll never give up, NEVER...(<---Echo)


(Chorus)


(Verse 3)

The feelin' I get when kids, teachers the same, talk shit behind my back
I dont really give a fuck about that, If they say it to my face, I'll give them a smack
But what hurts me to the core is when my pops talks shit
Behind my back, to my face alike, that shit feels like I been stabbed in the gut wit a knife
He fucks up constantly, so what, I still love him, he's my dad
No matter how many sleepless nights I've had cryin' cuz he made me that sad
No matter how matter times he's hit me because he was mad
No matter how often or the extent of how he makes me feel bad
Blood is blood, there aint nothin' that comes between it
Don't matter how mad you are, or how many fights you've been in
I know two brothers, and when it comes to other people they defend eachother always, believe me I've seen it
That's the way it should be, trust me, take away your family you aint got no life
So think twice before you badmouth your blood, cuz that shit aint right
I've felt both of these from family, and the bark is worse than the bite...

(ChorusX3)

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

deep , hooks nice , great lyrics , nice flow , love it man

audio would be awesome

[Jay-19]

Yeah, that was really deep for sure!
I really liked it 2!

Perhaps you need to cut down on the lines a lil bit, coz it seems like the flow would be a lil "off" if you know what I mean.. but then again... I don't know what flow YOU have. Certainly we both have completely different flows.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

Yeah, that was really deep for sure!
I really liked it 2!

Perhaps you need to cut down on the lines a lil bit, coz it seems like the flow would be a lil "off" if you know what I mean.. but then again... I don't know what flow YOU have. Certainly we both have completely different flows.

its written to a beat ..... i aint heard the beat but it probly looks off coz the beat

[Infliction]

Yeah, that was really deep for sure!
I really liked it 2!

Perhaps you need to cut down on the lines a lil bit, coz it seems like the flow would be a lil "off" if you know what I mean.. but then again... I don't know what flow YOU have. Certainly we both have completely different flows.

its written to a beat ..... i aint heard the beat but it probly looks off coz the beat

Yea it goes good to the beat, but there are some lines i want to adjust because they sound forced and out of place, thanks a lot for hte feedback guys

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

Yeah, that was really deep for sure!
I really liked it 2!

Perhaps you need to cut down on the lines a lil bit, coz it seems like the flow would be a lil "off" if you know what I mean.. but then again... I don't know what flow YOU have. Certainly we both have completely different flows.

its written to a beat ..... i aint heard the beat but it probly looks off coz the beat

Yea it goes good to the beat, but there are some lines i want to adjust because they sound forced and out of place, thanks a lot for hte feedback guys

thats probly forced multis, remeber man when it comes to deep lyrics its meaning over multi

[Infliction]

Yea, thanks for the tip man ill look it over and change some shit