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Le Verse

Postby Kez » Nov 20th, '06, 20:44

Skinned deer on the floor with some hippo smeared on the wall
I'm not scared to skin human, you should fear me an' all
Borrow a bible from Shaw and flip through the fucking Testaments
My favourite one is Exodus cause i fucking have sex with it!
After i'm done i notice there's a smear in my ass
And my victim is gonna notice too when i appear in the grass
Come on stage, nah, i'm joking i don't have the guts
I'd come on, get booed off and Clowes would just say that that's enough!(That's enough!)
These raps head around school like hot cakes
Except you don't buy hot cakes just to throw in the creator's long face!
Or maybe you do, cause i wouldn't put it past you
Nah, we're not bullies, stop telling mentors bullshit Matthew!
Don't make us break your legs when we get out of school

It's sad cause i think there was a time when they thought i was cool!
If you don't like this track, fuck ya
You can't brag, you're so lacklustre, you rap puke but it gets sent back up ya!

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Explanations:

Shaw = my RE teacher who reckons i need medication
Mentors = career people in my school
Clowes = my music teacher
Hot cakes remark = recently i made a CD and the news has soon travelled, but everybody is takin the piss and askin for one, but most just want it to laugh at it. so that's what that line is.
Last edited by Kez on Nov 20th, '06, 23:48, edited 1 time in total.
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Postby C-Game » Nov 20th, '06, 21:33

nice stuff man
like those multies
and good flow
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 20th, '06, 23:32

some things

why is

deer on the floor - bolded :confusion:

exodus - bolded :confusion:

also

Borrow a bible from Shaw and flip through the fucking Testaments
My favourite one is Exodus cause i fucking have sex with it!


that dotn really rythm if you prounounce correctly

Come on stage, nah, i'm joking i don't have the guts
I'd come on, get booed off and Clowes would just say that's enough!

that dont rythm either


These raps head around school like hot cakes
Except you don't buy hot cakes just to throw in the creator's long face!

neither does that :whistle:


all the other rythms are great those were slack


also my advice stop bolding, it focuses a rap to much on the rythms and end up geting feed like this :sweating:

but the whole concept is real kool shit :D
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Postby Inzanity » Nov 22nd, '06, 16:53

Bar wrote:some things

why is

deer on the floor - bolded :confusion:

exodus - bolded :confusion:

also

Borrow a bible from Shaw and flip through the fucking Testaments
My favourite one is Exodus cause i fucking have sex with it!


that dotn really rythm if you prounounce correctly

Come on stage, nah, i'm joking i don't have the guts
I'd come on, get booed off and Clowes would just say that's enough!

that dont rythm either


These raps head around school like hot cakes
Except you don't buy hot cakes just to throw in the creator's long face!

neither does that :whistle:


all the other rythms are great those were slack


also my advice stop bolding, it focuses a rap to much on the rythms and end up geting feed like this :sweating:

but the whole concept is real kool shit :D


don't u get what he was doing for the lines that don't actully rhyme he was using compound syllable sound combined Eminem does it all the time alot of rappers do it
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