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[soperman005]

Imagine being depressed every damn day
Pain residing, incurable by a bandaid
Half year ago, I was close to suicide
Felt like i failed at life, it was like do or die
This flow is exposure of a man's true feelings
A dose of darkness like evil and stealing
In my ford I was livin, automobilin'
Till' I wrecked it and experienced the realness
Of the real world, made me wanna hurl
But a few weeks later I found this girl
And at first everything was good with her
Then we lied to each other, became sinners
We started fightin n showed feelings of the inner
She betrayed me and lied so I skipped dinners
At first it was you, babe, but now it's me
I want to make it work, undoubtedly
I remember sleepin over, you was sound asleep
I admired you, but now it's all about me
I did shit to piss you off, deliberately
But after that party, I just felt bitter, you see?
I acted like a I cared but did shit moderately
I sometimes pretended like you was botherin me
I hope that you accept this apology
Take my hand one last time, and follow me
This is the last honest promise
I make and wont break, I'll astonish
Take the same path and it'll lead to great things
Overcome the obstacles of me turnin 18
And going to college while you still high schoolin
I love my girl, who the fuck am I foolin?
Believe me it's been awkward recently
But it'll change for the good, quickly you'll see

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[C-Game]

nice man
start was really nice
keep it up

[Restlesswon]

damn nice shit,make that into an audio aha

[Kez]

Liking the multies