Need feedback

by **ShadyGD26** » Dec 8th, '06, 03:57

thts pretty good....it was deep an there was more to it than alot of word play so the imagery was present...major plus in writing....I couldn't find a rhyming scheme or a clear rhythm might jus be me but...overall 8-10...good stuff

by **Enimee** » Dec 8th, '06, 04:27

not sayin its great, but it def wasnt bad...umm like whats his face said it did lack some rhym and rythm, great wordplay though i think...only tng i disagree was it was a bit repetative, not substantialy...the writer should keep it up and get more posts

by **C-Game** » Dec 8th, '06, 19:54

yea it was kool sarah
u cld do better
rhymes were lackin hon

yea i agree wit maybe that line was kool and so is

will be piercen your back a moral crime, loyalty is unexistant,

there for the ups, quick to run 0ut when da cash runs 0ut n shit erupts,

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Dec 16th, '06, 13:28

it was

A. lil pimp
B. kojack - coz he didnt want post his stuff incase it got stole, so asked sarah to do it for him

and its wasnt horrible

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Dec 16th, '06, 13:38

Sarah wrote:
Bar wrote:it was

A. lil pimp
B. kojack - coz he didnt want post his stuff incase it got stole, so asked sarah to do it for him

and its wasnt horrible

None of them hun but thanks for the feed

dam i was positive it was goni be one of them...... :unsure:

by **$0 R3@L** » Dec 16th, '06, 13:47

McMaybe wrote:the only good line their was - trade you for the best paid, feelin betrayed

i agree wit maybe.....got a lil repetive,but not abad attempt really just work on it more.

by **C-Game** » Dec 16th, '06, 18:16

who wrote it sarah
is it some one from TR...

by **C-Game** » Dec 17th, '06, 08:08

hmm "they're"
so its a group eh

anyone known among us

Need feedback

Who is online