next year will be a good one - poem

by **ShadyAngel** » Dec 26th, '06, 17:46

The troubles that I have faced
Have gone away for now
The dreams that I have lost
Have returned somehow.

The nightmares I once believed
Have gone and melted away
Just as through the dawn
Shines a brand new day.

The buds of spring
Bring a brand new year
Hopefully a happy one
Free of pain and tears

I know it will get better
This I know is true
As nothing can be as bad
As the year I

by **Semper Fidelis** » Dec 26th, '06, 18:13

I like your scheme ABCB, you keep it up nice it goes on the whole rhyme.
now-somehow
away - day
year-tear(S)

Wordchoice is fine, i don't have any critic on it.

As you said it is a regular rhyme(if it is)
You could better use more complicated words if you know what i mean?
Just put the dots on the I(that is a dutch sentence) finish it, make it more perfect.

by **C-Game** » Dec 26th, '06, 18:13

awww sweet
try to make it a lil longer hun

by **ShadyAngel** » Dec 26th, '06, 18:16

i dont really know how to do punctuation at the end of the lines and stuff if u no what i mean.

i dont nomay log words im dumb :P lol

na i guess i could. i did have one that has a lot in but no one understood it so i threw it away lol. i dont no if it was my writing or they were just thick.. i blame the latter.

- will do cgame

by **Inzanity** » Dec 26th, '06, 18:37

I like it. U could've made it longer but it was good. :smoking:

next year will be a good one - poem

next year will be a good one - poem

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