The TRshady Forum became read-only in December 2014. The 10 year history will live on, in this archive.
Continue the discussion with the new home for the Eminem and Hip Hop discussion: HipHopShelter.com.

My First Freestyle

Want to share a poem, story or a moving article? Share creative literature text here.

My First Freestyle

Postby SajN » Apr 3rd, '07, 16:16

Yes thats true .. My first one .. so dont expect this to be good ..

You say all I say is bullshit.
well, theres a handle, grab it and pull-bitch.
cuz its a man there who is wise-and
strong as Mike Tys-on
He can help u but u have to pay five thousand.
Dont care about the price,
listen to him, thats my best advice,
cuz if u're trying to be up to something
u may get ur throat sliced..
I bet that is not what u want, I know 'bout ur life.
I know that had thoughts about comitting suicide,
but still u dont want to die.
I understand u, I know that u rap
and want a breaktrough in this life that u've got.
But it will not help if u just go around and smoke crack.
this will not make u the next 2Pac.
and the album u want to make will never be on top
and noone will know u as LiL Doc ..


Lil Doc is just made up . No real person ---


Any feedback ..
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
User avatar
SajN
The Almighty
The Almighty
 
Posts: 14943
Joined: Oct 19th, '06, 18:04
Location: Norway
Gender: Male

Postby Rain Matrix » Apr 3rd, '07, 16:19

this was pretty dam good

Look out 4 my alter ego... tha AFTERMATH DOWNPOUR :)
Last edited by Rain Matrix on Apr 9th, '07, 03:27, edited 1 time in total.
User avatar
Rain Matrix
Soldier
Soldier
 
Posts: 1967
Joined: Oct 6th, '06, 21:25
Location: In that mirage you saw.
Gender: Male

Postby SajN » Apr 3rd, '07, 16:21

My Alter Ego is lil doc .. Lol .. Can it be ? Idk ..
Tnx anyway
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
User avatar
SajN
The Almighty
The Almighty
 
Posts: 14943
Joined: Oct 19th, '06, 18:04
Location: Norway
Gender: Male

Postby SajN » Apr 4th, '07, 12:57

More feedback please?
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
User avatar
SajN
The Almighty
The Almighty
 
Posts: 14943
Joined: Oct 19th, '06, 18:04
Location: Norway
Gender: Male

Postby Big-T » Apr 4th, '07, 14:24

reli good 4 a freestyle man keep it up. im just gettin in2 freestyling more than riting now so i no how it goes (sorta) :D
Clones are people two.
User avatar
Big-T
Soldier
Soldier
 
Posts: 1300
Joined: Oct 15th, '06, 10:43
Location: London, U.K
Gender: Male

Postby Xray » Apr 5th, '07, 12:19

how do we know its a real freestyle since its quoted and since its written and since thers no audio but i it is than its good :smoking:
Image
Over a billion Muslims, you could never stop Islam
Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


New Track: The Nightmare
User avatar
Xray
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 9920
Joined: Feb 21st, '07, 04:37
Location: Australia
Gender: Male

Postby SajN » Apr 5th, '07, 15:06

I quoted this myself like
this
or
this
.. understand ? :p

And I did record it, and after that I listened to the recording and wrote it down ..

It wasnt a recording with beat and all .. It was rvoice recording with my mobile .. but I dont have the recording more..


But thanks anyway
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
User avatar
SajN
The Almighty
The Almighty
 
Posts: 14943
Joined: Oct 19th, '06, 18:04
Location: Norway
Gender: Male

Postby lilbusta » Apr 7th, '07, 13:57

yeah thats pretty tight for a freestyle. I was definately feelin it!
Fusion Click for lyf!!!
lilbusta
Trailer Trash
Trailer Trash
 
Posts: 164
Joined: Nov 24th, '06, 13:27

Postby Rae » Apr 7th, '07, 16:06

that was actually pretty good.
keep it up!

and i like Lil Doc ... sounds hot 2 me ;)
screename on Zune Social - HispanicLUVER

Image

I drink more than you, I party harder than you do, And my car is faster than yours too! RAWWRR!

www.myspace.com/harleyquinn667 <--- add me
User avatar
Rae
Soldier
Soldier
 
Posts: 1987
Joined: Feb 9th, '06, 19:38
Location: SC
Gender: Female

Postby SajN » Apr 7th, '07, 16:30

Tnx ..
Cool to read that u guys have written :D
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
User avatar
SajN
The Almighty
The Almighty
 
Posts: 14943
Joined: Oct 19th, '06, 18:04
Location: Norway
Gender: Male

Postby SajN » Apr 8th, '07, 21:37

more feeds please
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
User avatar
SajN
The Almighty
The Almighty
 
Posts: 14943
Joined: Oct 19th, '06, 18:04
Location: Norway
Gender: Male

Postby Unscarred » Apr 9th, '07, 14:25

Yea is good keep doing this way
Image
“The individual has always had to struggle to keep from being overwhelmed by the tribe. If you try it, you will be lonely often, and sometimes frightened. But no price is too high to pay for the privilege of owning yourself.”
Friedrich Nietzsche
User avatar
Unscarred
Role Model
Role Model
 
Posts: 3711
Joined: Apr 5th, '07, 08:36
Gender: Male


Return to Creative Writing



Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users

cron