Don't Hate, Dispise

[Tash8]

I Don't Hate, I Dispise cuz you all Fake but Wise
you all Filled Up with Lies, your Killed in all Eyes
Drilled Up yo' Thighs, Distilled and High-ed

When I meet up wit you, I ain't gon' be Lyrically Spittin'
I'ma be Killingly Pissin', bullets while you Sittin' Continueingly Shittin'

My Lyrics are Bombs, so when you Hear it be Alarmed
cause you Feel It with Harm, coming with Spirit and Armed,
to Kill a Hypocrite, Till This Type of Shit, Dies
out with a Mill in Spirit and no Lies.


I wrote this really quick, i didn't work on structure, flow or any of that stuff and I'm not going to bother... but still plz feed.

This whole thing has meaning to it, if you don't understand a part let know i'll explain it.

[$0 R3@L]

if your not gonna bother working on flow,structure or 'any of that other stuff' what do you want us to say??? cause everyones gonna tell you thats whats missing from your writing work.Seems pretty dumb why you'd just write without wanting to improve yourself and not use the feed you've been getting.

[Tash8]

if your not gonna bother working on flow,structure or 'any of that other stuff' what do you want us to say??? cause everyones gonna tell you thats whats missing from your writing work.Seems pretty dumb why you'd just write without wanting to improve yourself and not use the feed you've been getting.

there's more to feed than structure and flow you know...

[$0 R3@L]

if your not gonna bother working on flow,structure or 'any of that other stuff' what do you want us to say??? cause everyones gonna tell you thats whats missing from your writing work.Seems pretty dumb why you'd just write without wanting to improve yourself and not use the feed you've been getting.

there's more to feed than structure and flow you know...

theres more to feeding a rap verse then flow,structure and 'any of that other stuff' aka; lyrics,concept?

sooooo er what is it...

[stevethetruth]

if your not gonna bother working on flow,structure or 'any of that other stuff' what do you want us to say??? cause everyones gonna tell you thats whats missing from your writing work.Seems pretty dumb why you'd just write without wanting to improve yourself and not use the feed you've been getting.

what he said

[JMG]

yeah u have potensial but u have to atleast work on ur flow .

[C-Game]

hey tash ...man do u ryt to a beat.. or just ryt???

i mean if u ryt to a beat da flow and structure problems get solved easily..

[Tash8]

nah this wasn't ment for a song or anything so i just wrote it instead of doing homework...

[Hadez]

nah this wasn't ment for a song or anything so i just wrote it instead of doing homework...

even if its not to a song you can write it to a beat. just throw on some head phones. its good practice.

[Tash8]

that makes sense, it can easily fix the structure and probably flow..

thanks for advice, i might just do that one day.

[James R.]

So yeah the flow and structure were off but thats all been said. Sounds like a lil freestyle you just threw together. Write smtn serious or link me to smtn cuz it seems like you have the ability to be pretty good.