Something I Did In School

[IceAxe]

I wrote this on Thursday instead of participateing in English class, would've posted it then but i lost it. I found it so here it is, not long but oh well.

my sick -jaw spits-no-flaw like -law
the shit's-raw, ripped-flow-off dont strike -soft

it-spikes-y'all this-rite-gnaws no light-scrawl
ig-nite-thrall with-tight-squalls write-gall

this-breeze freeze, thus be ze-ro degrees
with-E's in one plus threes the bi-ro leaks

disease, sneeze dont fuss plea-no a-ppease
no reprise see wont cuss, decree flow at-ease

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

you need to stop bolding stuff that isnt ryhmes

[IceAxe]

^ i didnt bold anything that didnt rhyme with something else

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

you must pounounce different then

[IceAxe]

^ probably

[Tash8]

it has sick flow, atleast the way i did it

but not your best

keep it up

[Hadez]

^ i didnt bold anything that didnt rhyme with something else

disease, sneeze dont fuss plea-no a-ppease
no reprise see wont cuss, decree flow at-ease

wut was reprise sposed to rhyme with?


anyway, like tash said its got a nice flow to it. keep it up.

[IceAxe]

@ hadez - it's pronounced like re-preez

thanks for feedin y'all

[James R.]

You showed off your ability to make multies, but it's only impressive when you do so with a purpose. And the bolding and all is cool, but not needed, and gets borderline annoying. The flow was decent, but the content was nothing special, but you weren't going for that. Pretty good multies.