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Straight From Cali (song)*still editing*

Postby Flamez » May 17th, '07, 23:37

"Straight From Cali" didn't know what to put for the song name lol :sweating:

i know its not that great but tell me what you think.. i'm gonna audio this btw :)

***still editing this song***

[Chorus] x2

Straight From the streets of Southern Cali from Anaheim
thats where i came from where i became a true emcee
those bitches hating on me you see you got no shit on me

[Verse 1]

guess who's back once again racing the twenty-four hour clock
around the block with a glock in my hand with no safety lock
as i walk through the streets screaming fuck the world like 2pac
got this rap shit on lock when i grab the mic the light shines bright
ignite excite the crowd with the sick tight shit i write every night
never stage fright ever but always causing fist fights every time
spittin' ill rhymes sick flowing creating verbal lyrical crimes
don't get outta line i'm sick from the mind throwing punchlines
combine intertwine my fiery rhymez that i dangerously design
tha world is mine in this rap game i got fame with my sizzling name
a rapper who became known as flamez thats what i became
ain't the same as the rest i'm unique ain't lame i'll lyrically slaughter you too
take my cock down your throat and choke till' your face turns blue
till my last breath till death i'm a rap if you hating on me well fuck you

[Chorus] x2

Straight From the streets of Southern Cali from Anaheim
thats where i came from where i became a true emcee
those bitches hating on me you see you got no shit on me

[Verse 2]

fuck the bush administration fuckin' pussies with monkey looking faces
that lil dumb stupid faggot racist who's keeps fillin' our country with disgraces
tearin' em' apart thats why his wife broke heart cuz bush is gay he a hoe
can't fuck his wife thats why she got a knife and chopped his dick right off you know
fo sho ain't gonna concede i'm a proceed succeed aggrieve achieve my goals fo to be on top
best believe you can't stop me whether a big shot or not all i need for you to be dead is one shot
if you think i'm wack n' suck when rappin' well check again i'm expose ya weak spots
well you might wanna have a listen to mims this is why i'm hot cuz that shit flops
i'm creatin' shit makin' it complex more perplex show me some respect i'm Malcolm x
you bitches request expect to have unprotected sex well let me see do i accept or reject
but fuck rednecks i'll pass next!

[Chorus] x2

Straight From the streets of Southern Cali from Anaheim
thats where i came from where i became a true emcee
those bitches hating on me you see you got no shit on me



[Verse 3]

I'm Tryin' to get to that elite level on top but can't seem to reach it
i keep fallin' back gotta admit it i'm not even close to it not one bit
feels like i'm not permitted to reach it but one this is i won't quit
no matter how many pits i fall in i'm a get up and keep trying
till i'm dying put to rest thats the day it ends with people crying
but until then i'm a keep fryin' enemies with the skills i possess
i'm blessed till death with finesse progressin' forward with success
you don't wanna mess with me unless you got a plan to put me down
don't even try unless you wanna be the laughing clown of the town
i don't back down fore' you know u be laying flat on the ground
the people which who i get down be representin' the brown
a vato wearing the royal crown from southern cali soy 100% Mexicano
proud to be a Hispano Latino who puttin' it down for the Chicanos

[Chorus] x4

Straight From the streets of Southern Cali from Anaheim
thats where i came from where i became a true emcee
those bitches hating on me you see you got no shit on me


feedback appreciated
Last edited by Flamez on May 18th, '07, 06:06, edited 3 times in total.
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Postby sixersi349 » May 17th, '07, 23:58

if it has a weat coast beat, ill prolly like it
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Postby IceAxe » May 18th, '07, 00:44

the hook sounds like somethin from the Encore track with Em,50,and Dre


"...all the way to them 8 mile alleys, lets rally, hands up for the grand finale"

but it was good... keep it up
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Postby Flamez » May 18th, '07, 02:05

changed the chorus cuz got a new beat and editing some things..

and thanx for the feedback

and mcmaybe too bad you don't like west coast style and well everyone has there style they like don't they lol so you wont' like this song then :sweating:
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Postby Tash8 » May 18th, '07, 03:31

fuck the bush adminstration fuckin' pussies with monkey looking faces
that lil dumb stupid faggot racist who's destroying this country and many other places


reminded me of an eminem song, but i'm not saying you bit, i'm just sayin'

but one thing about that, that bolded line just seemed to be force, know what i'm saying?

fuck the bush administration fuckin' pussies with monkey looking faces
that lil dumb stupid faggot racist who's keeps fillin' our country with disgraces

to me that just sounds better and not too force, know what i'm saying

keep it up, i liked the other chorus though
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Postby Flamez » May 18th, '07, 04:53

i see but i dont' bite lyrics i just write and thats whats coming from my head..

and yea i see and i'm still editing some parts of the lyrics and stuff :sweating:

and yea i see what you mean that line

that lil dumb stupid faggot racist who's keeps fillin' our country with disgraces << i'm use this better it sounds better to me too and thanx man and the chorus idk i just had to change it you ppl think i bite :shakehead: but i wanted to change it so it sounds better :sweating:
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Postby Flamez » May 18th, '07, 05:01

thanx and this is my first rap song since i dont' remember lol hope it comes out good on audio :happy:
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Postby Tash8 » May 18th, '07, 05:41

KB24 wrote:i see but i dont' bite lyrics i just write and thats whats coming from my head..

and yea i see and i'm still editing some parts of the lyrics and stuff :sweating:

and yea i see what you mean that line

that lil dumb stupid faggot racist who's keeps fillin' our country with disgraces << i'm use this better it sounds better to me too and thanx man and the chorus idk i just had to change it you ppl think i bite :shakehead: but i wanted to change it so it sounds better :sweating:


yea it's cool, I know your not biting or anything.. but good job keep it up and yea np.
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Postby James R. » May 18th, '07, 17:42

flow was off, probably sounds decent to a beat. i wasn't really feelin it, but I dont like many rappers with that west coast style. Only people I like are snoop, dre, some game, and pac lol. But yeah it wasnt bad, just not what I'd wanna hear. The lyrics were decent, but the flow brought it down. but writing to a beat might make it seem that way.
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