How I Get Thru My Classes

[Tash8]

Well writing shit like this gets me thru my classes, I wrote this in about 5-10 min

In a sense, I'm trenched, tense with 3 sense all
in my pencil, with a paper beside me
i'm really violent, see the words abide me
and hurt who lie here and die here
yea, I lie here, the 408, hate, formulates, traits
of killers in their bloodplates, and deflates, the ways
of living, a fact, that intacts, my tracks, on the CD Packs

Feed please

[lil_bayly]

I notice that most of the rhymes u write are very deep, maybe its just me but i like this one its dark and full of depressed emotions

[Tash8]

most of the stuff i write is usually in the sense I am at that point. and I was pretty depressed because I mean I was in class. so yea

thanks for feed

[IceAxe]

you know what i think about this... but i re-read it and saw that you more or less rhyme "lie here" with it's self, watch out for that

and hurt who lie here and die here
yea, I lie here

[Tash8]

yea i know it was done on a purpose though

I hurt people who lie, I lie here

meaning hurt myself as well.

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

nice verse man, but dont get into the habit of bolding it annoys me...alot lol

[Tash8]

lol aite, I stopped bolding, but I just wanted to point out the rhymes, I won't do it again

thanks for feed, please more!

[sixersi349]

nice verse

[Tash8]

^ thanks

[Tash8]

haha yea, that's how i get thru

thanks, more feed please

[James R.]

had meaning. the bolding thing is unnecessary. writing is all about hearing it, that's why people should read it out loud. when you write something you shouldn't want or need to show them what to see, honestly doing that was distracting. The song itself was decent. You had a lot of rhyming and it all actually made sense, so props on that. But overall I dont think it was amazing simply because I've seen you write better. The flow was a little rough also.

[Tash8]

^ thanks for the feed james