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Don't Try to Change Me

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Don't Try to Change Me

Postby Tash8 » May 31st, '07, 22:51

[Chorus - 2x]
I'm tired of following you around
I'm tired of swallowing your shit
I'm tired and I don't know what about
I'm tried of all your fucking bullshit

[Hook 4x]
I'm tired of respecting you, when you don't respect me
I'm tired of detecting you, when you don't detect me

and as we keep letting the earth evolve
I'm always getting hurt, but I will solve
that' I'm most cursed of all
and it's time for me to just burst and fall
but the worst of all
is that I didn't even believe in me
the reason is, you were deceivin' me
you were misleadin' me, too seein' me
as some kind of hoax, like my mind is a joke
and it shows how much of a friend you are
I just wanted to show you and to all
that you used to me to get what you want
and you leave me out, when you don't want any more
[Break]
I ain't done yet, cause this is the longest verse
I've written yet, cause of the strongest curse
that i've recieved from you fobbest percs
so please stop, it hurts
it's not a plea but an honest request
your smarter now, but I'm smartest despues
we grow up and you feel the pain I felt
and it will help, show you the strain you delts

despues - spanish for after

ignore the structure cause this was ment for a beat I made, but the beat didn't work so I just thought I'd rewrite the whole thing to a diff beat

so please feed
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Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » May 31st, '07, 22:54

damn nice lyrics....
would love to hear them on audio :happy:
seems like u get a good flow there :)
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Postby Hadez » May 31st, '07, 22:56

pretty good man, propz
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Postby Tash8 » May 31st, '07, 23:08

thanks for the feed :D more please
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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby Tash8 » Jun 2nd, '07, 14:48

bump
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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby Nu Syd » Jun 2nd, '07, 14:50

nice read man, be cool to be an audio to :b:
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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby Tash8 » Jun 2nd, '07, 14:53

FPV Falcon wrote:nice read man, be cool to be an audio to :b:



this was ment for an audio, I wrote this to my own beat, but then I fucked up my beat somehow and how i can't use it unless I do the exact same flow [bar] of a drum pattern
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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby Tash8 » Jun 2nd, '07, 20:40

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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby IceAxe » Jun 2nd, '07, 20:47

The chorus/hook was alright . Flowed real good... nice lyrics in it... this would make a good audio

Good job man :y:
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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby Tash8 » Jun 2nd, '07, 21:03

IceAxe wrote:The chorus/hook was alright . Flowed real good... nice lyrics in it... this would make a good audio

Good job man :y:


thanks, i went for simple on chorus and listened to bar's advice..

thanks and more please
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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby Tash8 » Jun 3rd, '07, 23:03

M ORE ASDfou sdaifjsdakl fjasd]pfsda

MORE FEED PLEASE
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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby rlxhustlr » Jun 4th, '07, 04:44

heck yea propz man that was some pretty good lyrics! :smoking:
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Re: Don't Try to Change Me

Postby Tash8 » Jun 4th, '07, 14:58

propz man

more please
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