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****When I Close My Eyes****

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****When I Close My Eyes****

Postby Flamez » Jun 12th, '07, 06:13

When i close my eyes i start to think deeply and visualize what i feel deep inside
i see myself in agonizing pain beside my bed with a bucket full of tears i cried
if i'm strong then why do i feel weak inside is it fears that i can't hide
why do i feel like i already died its like i'm seeing the future right before my eyes
time does fly by, is it time to say goodbye, is it the end of my life is it demise
will i ever find the answers to the questions intertiwned that are runnin' thru my mind
will i ever be able to open my eyes and see the light of day again cuz i feel i'm blind
I feel like i'm in a living nightmare a dream that i'm trapped in and can't get out of alive
a place that i won't survive no matter how hard i strive i just won't thrive
will i ever revive back come to conscious again have i lost my memory
i can't seem to remember a thing its like i been broken down to debris
locked up in a jail cell all alone just me feeling like i'll never be free
tied up in chains like the devil has a hold my guardian angel and me
just when all seemed hopeless i awake and open my eyes and see God
I see him holding his hand out to me tellin me to get up, it seemed odd
but he pulled me up and said "whenever you need me i'll be there for you
don't be afraid just believe in yourself and have faith in everything you do"

feedback appreciated :8)
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Re: ****When I Close My Eyes****

Postby Tash8 » Jun 12th, '07, 20:56

real deep man

the rhymes are good, it works well, flows decently, i like real deep alot so keep it up :D
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Re: ****When I Close My Eyes****

Postby Flamez » Jun 12th, '07, 21:44

thanx a lot man for the feed :happy:
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Re: ****When I Close My Eyes****

Postby sinemm » Jun 13th, '07, 12:41

hmm not bad :smoking:
likes it
deeply n nice
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Re: ****When I Close My Eyes****

Postby Flamez » Jun 13th, '07, 14:54

thanx hunn :8)
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Re: ****When I Close My Eyes****

Postby shady_aftermathzz » Jun 14th, '07, 06:21

really feelin' it bru'/ keep up the good work
peace
In the event of my Demise ---- Tupac

In the Event of My Demise
when my heart can beat no more
I Hope I Die For A Principle
or A Belief that I had Lived 4
I will die Before My Time
Because I feel the shadow's Depth
so much I wanted 2 accomplish
before I reached my Death
I have come 2 grips with the possibility
and wiped the last tear from My eyes
I Loved All who were Positive
In the event of my Demise





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Re: ****When I Close My Eyes****

Postby Flamez » Jun 14th, '07, 06:35

thanx for the feed man appreciate it :8)
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