small peice i never got round to finishing

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im a villian on the mic killin what i write spillin till the night
willing to the fight chilling with the spite thrilling like a knight
im quite, unpredictable i spun n killed the fool its fun to rip a school,
wid the lyrics i done, then spat the drool your whole raps like stool,
small, smelly and stumped, so your all jelly and dumped,
slumped in a grave your track bumped and no one jumped at the rave,


i never, nor will i, get round to finish this so might aswell post it for thoughts on the ryhmes n such

[Tash8]

it's nice but here are a few changes i made that i think are better

im a sick villian on the mic killin what i write spillin till my fights
willing in the night chilling with the spite thrilling like a knight


idk to me that makes more sense.

[IceAxe]

im a sick villian on the mic killin what i write spillin till my fights
willing in the night chilling with the spite thrilling like a knight

Tight villian... sounds better to me

but this had some good rhymes in it...with a nice flow

pretty good verse

[Tash8]

ur right

tight villians would add ot the multis...

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^ true does work better


like i said i never got round to finishing it but i dunno fi i would have thought of that lol

props on feed