Part of a Song

[Tash8]

This is my first 8 lines out the 48 i have to write for the song


I feel like death just came about, without a doubt, I doubt
my spirit will live longer, so i justify out by lyrics
and it's not like I didn't try my best cause I did but when I die
I'll die depressed, but at the same time when dead I'll lie blessed
with the opportunities that came along, but it was the same all along
i didn't give it out, that's why I didn't get to live devout
there's no one meaning to life because life brings different meanings
so don't expect to know the answer because we all have unique and potent feelings


thanks and feed please

[shady_aftermathzz]

i cant really feed on rhymes n' structures bru' coz' i m struggling myself but yeah i liked the concept of it n' ya hit the door with the last line....yeah we all unique/ keep up the good work, dont stop/
best comment i could give lamo
peace


naw, go read ma shits n' drop some, no one readz mine *cries* buhuhuhuhu

[Tash8]

thanks for feed

i'll check yours out later, try to not makes ur soo long because people don't really like things that are too long, that's why i only posted 8 lines rather than my whole 48

[shady_aftermathzz]

thanks for feed

i'll check yours out later, try to not makes ur soo long because people don't really like things that are too long, that's why i only posted 8 lines rather than my whole 48

aigght tash, cool...thanks for the tips


all ya lazybums, ya aint getting ma whole shit frm now on muahahahahhaa *evil laugh*
( everyone be thinking----UR SHIT SUCKED ANYWAY) i know i know but im tryin'

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i really liked it man, nice concept and good ryhming, everyhting made sens aswell and nothign was forced

only thing that bugged me is

so don't expect to know the answer because we all have unique and potent feelings


sounds much better i think


good work though man, keep it up

[Tash8]

thanks for the feed, i guess i forgot the we lol

thanks