chapter 1

[Ka0t1c]

my life has been quite a ride when I arrived in one nine
'85 of May, 6th was the day but was night you could say

cuz no time I delayed to find my own way outside from the gray
to see what sights were to lay my eyes on to stay

6 pounds, 5 ounces I weighed, dad called 911, all was ok
my mom said she prayed cuz in their house I was made

well the ambulance came, found where the number relayed from
then panic did fade cuz medics brought aid on 12 hundred Woodlawn
: a dead end untamed

Kevin they named me, their son,
and it changed them forever...

a second chapter awaits just let me put it together and paste...

[James R.]

That was an interesting piece man. You had a weird kinda flow/rhyme scheme. I kinda like it but I'm not sure. I think chapter two will sell me on the style. I like the concept of doing chapters of (i'm assuming) your life. One thing I'd stay away from is the way you did the date because it was kind of confusing.

[Ka0t1c]

thanx, i thought the same too about putting the date like the way i did, i may change it if i consider using it in the future