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Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 26th, '07, 17:09

i wanna collabo with someone who's got plenty of ammo when drama comes
so nobody can handle us as would Tommy Guns, yeah buddy it's time for fun

get Nutty out ya mind like Eddie, we'll run this forum
blood n guts lookin like spaghetti

well are ya ready, alarms go off hard n heavy
because we're starting strong

can't argue very long, our targets heading
up, but be calm, yet deadly, im setting the bombs

just keep steady then we're gone, never fuck with the veterans
you'd better run a marathon or you're death is caused

don't test the odds cuz at best you're done and you'll rest beyond
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: i rap this fast paced but you may be able to understand it t

Postby Inzanity » Aug 27th, '07, 21:23

that was good nice job on that. :y:
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Re: i rap this fast paced but you may be able to understand it t

Postby C-Game » Aug 28th, '07, 08:59

first off i couldnt cope with the flow...
u havent mentioned the break points clearly so it was awkward...

and odd number of lines never work ( on text )

apart from that .. da vocab was decent...
some decent multies here and there
didnt notice any wordplay
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Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 28th, '07, 14:39

thank u for ur input, im not gonna fix it up, im just gonna put this behind me
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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