this gon' b a verse for a song..

[Flamez]

i'm a b doing wit some1 ain't finished yet need many more lines i think lol so if u wanna feed then go ahead if u don't fine by me just postin' this..

Its Syco Flash a newborn assassin bashin'
comin' boomin' in crashin' blastin' in smashin'
like tha CIA assassin Jason Bourne attackin'
trackin' down my enemies sendin' em' packin'
2 heaven or hell cuz i get it crackin' u know
with this golden flow as nice as an ass like whoa
with a sparklin' glow rhyme wreckin' thru breakin'
shatterin' glass with my lyrics bakin' you shakin'
u in for a rude awakenin' wakin' up achin' in pain
slicin' ya veins that only ya bones gon' remain
i'm an insane syco loco from S.L.A. 928
str8 outta that 714 Anaheim outta that cali state

[Tash8]

rhymes are way too forced but good vocab and good rhymed words, flow is good for the most part.

btw idk if u saw, but i also did a rhyme using Bourne

If I ever change, I will come back in true form
forgetting everything like I was a new-Bourne

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

same sorta rhymes you allways got man, switch it up a little bit, have to different type of rhymes next to each other and then break one down will the other stays a soplid rhyme

example:-

incompetent rappers who can pin bomb threat sent trappers

incompetent gets broking up rhyming each of its sylybles, but rappers just gets rhymed straight

not that thats for everyone, you might think its stupid thats just something i personely like doing, adding complex with simplicity, but your rhyming structure has stayed the same since..forever, venture into unknown styles and you'll learn more stuff


not that your rhymes are bad or nothing, just giving a tip

[patwivo]

this was pretty sweet