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Eh, just a verse.. Tell me what you think.

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Eh, just a verse.. Tell me what you think.

Postby Block » Nov 21st, '07, 22:22

Verse I'm shaping up for a song I'm gonna record


A cannibalistic sense to devour enemies
like bush in his war for oil-powered energy
the third reicht failed, now they're sendin' me
to wage war in your minds, epidemicly...
but see i've strayed from the course, an indomidable force
I'll "Conquor" brain "Waves", call it Surfing the shore
While Infecting young minds like Dirt in a sore..
You'll never be vets, only hurt in the war
Burnin' ya core.. No fiction, Picture the mortician,
drags your body off the field with limbs hangin'... And more missin'
Watch the gore glisten, off severed throats of the poor victims
It's a grousom thought, don't ignore; listen...
As I explore Physics.. Hey, I adorn fission...
Chemically split cells, and leave the axis of your Core Twisted



It feels immortal technique-ish to me, lol. Maybe cause I was listening to tech when I wrote it.
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Re: Eh, just a verse.. Tell me what you think.

Postby Block » Nov 22nd, '07, 23:54

Guess it's too intellectual for people to understand?
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 23rd, '07, 00:00

k block wrote:Guess it's too intellectual for people to understand?



guess smartass comments aint goin to help you get any feed at all ?
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Postby Block » Nov 23rd, '07, 01:39

Wasn't a smart ass comment, it's the truth. Guess it's hard to face facts?
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Postby Enimee » Nov 23rd, '07, 01:42

shyt was hard k block u stay fresh eh? guess you stepped it up a little? hehe guess it wasnt enough though !
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Postby Block » Nov 23rd, '07, 02:19

Thanks, enimee. Trying to step up audio.

and bar- I didn't mean EVERY PERSON. I saw 30 views and no responses.. That prompted my response. No need to be an ass.
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Nov 23rd, '07, 12:59

k block wrote:and bar- I didn't mean EVERY PERSON. I saw 30 views and no responses.. That prompted my response. No need to be an ass.


well the fact i clicked on the thread to give feed then seen the smart ass comment stopped me from reading witch prompted me not to feed the peice, all your had to do was bump the peice up :y:
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Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 23rd, '07, 17:52

thats some straight mind bending lyrical stuff

for tha sake of writing lets keep negative coments to a minimum

I don't want beef with k block

and if u do face me first so u'll be used to getting PWNED

just kidding
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